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Comment from Diana Kane
Fantastic work here. I love how they are always problem-solving and figuring out a way to get the job done. Dumpster diving! Too funny! Can never have too much humor in this kind of story to balance it out. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Fantastic work here. I love how they are always problem-solving and figuring out a way to get the job done. Dumpster diving! Too funny! Can never have too much humor in this kind of story to balance it out. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you appreciated it. One thing I realized, there is no moment where there isn't some dilemma throughout this entire series. I hope you can follow it. I had to do a day' s worth of you tube of ceawling through caves...**spoiler**
Comment from Mistydawn
These two have had quite an adventure. Hopefully, things will calm down for them for a little while. When I read the part about watching too much TV I laughed. I had an incident where I freaked out over nothing because of something I saw on TV. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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These two have had quite an adventure. Hopefully, things will calm down for them for a little while. When I read the part about watching too much TV I laughed. I had an incident where I freaked out over nothing because of something I saw on TV. Your story is well-written, very interesting. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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I look forward to having you read more. I will give you a *spoiler* there is no calm moment in this whole story. I am nervous because it is brand new. I've a couple of writing friends read it. They really liked it. Thank for such an involved review.
Comment from paleface
A nice piece of artistry in a nutshell. Personally it wasn't all that interesting to me though I can respect the fact that this poet took the time to be so long winded.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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A nice piece of artistry in a nutshell. Personally it wasn't all that interesting to me though I can respect the fact that this poet took the time to be so long winded.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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This genre is prose. I'm sorry you were misled thinking it was going to be a poem. I do have some poems in my portfolio if you care to peruse those. No, this is pure prose. Thank you for your efforts at a review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
It's funny what a contest can do to your creative buds. Now I'm intrigued too why so many guns and man guarding that spot. I guess we will see in the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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It's funny what a contest can do to your creative buds. Now I'm intrigued too why so many guns and man guarding that spot. I guess we will see in the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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It was interesting when they gave the intro they left it open for different genres. There was chainsaw off in the distance, a very foggy road so you could barely see where you are walking and a crow. So I had this take place in Crow country, Native American tribe. Thank you for your involved review.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I'm impressed with the brave duo in their pursuit of more knowledge about this little house. I would think it would be better to run away!
In your book description:
"walkking into a memorable adventure" (walking)
"As the bedraggled, duo trudged" (no comma just one adjective before the noun)
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Well, I'm impressed with the brave duo in their pursuit of more knowledge about this little house. I would think it would be better to run away!
In your book description:
"walkking into a memorable adventure" (walking)
"As the bedraggled, duo trudged" (no comma just one adjective before the noun)
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Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you. You are already helping. I'm excited because this story is so new. This was inspired by a contest. It was interesting when they gave the intro they left it open for different genres. There was chainsaw off in the distance, a very foggy road so you could barely see where you are walking and a crow. So I had this take place in Crow country, Native American tribe. Thank you for your involved review.
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I enjoyed seeing your new style of writing!