One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have lots of fond memories and picking blue bells and you revived them here in your poem as you brought the scene to life with your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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I have lots of fond memories and picking blue bells and you revived them here in your poem as you brought the scene to life with your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you very much, Dolly. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great 575. I love the entire presentation--the color scheme, the picture, the rhyme, the alliteration, and your sweet message. It all works nicely to create a great contest entry, Mystery Author. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This is a great 575. I love the entire presentation--the color scheme, the picture, the rhyme, the alliteration, and your sweet message. It all works nicely to create a great contest entry, Mystery Author. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review, Jan. Have a great weekend.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, clear and creative. The first two
lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says it all!
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem well.
Have a great weekend!
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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The author's words are descriptive, clear and creative. The first two
lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line says it all!
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem well.
Have a great weekend!
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Comment from victor 66
It's interesting that you bring up your poem and I read it today. In Reading Pennsylvania, it was 85° with 90% humidity. Then about 5:30 pm, dark clouds came and within an hour the temperature dropped 15° but the humidity is still about the same. Still, it was much more comfortable. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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It's interesting that you bring up your poem and I read it today. In Reading Pennsylvania, it was 85° with 90% humidity. Then about 5:30 pm, dark clouds came and within an hour the temperature dropped 15° but the humidity is still about the same. Still, it was much more comfortable. Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thank you very much.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Peter Henrich
I like this poem a lot.
It's a very sensual poem. And the phrases "cool rain" and "wet earth" blend two elements of nature in a very nice way.
"bluebell bends to smell" creates a nice visual, though it feels not quite as striking as the rest of the poem.
Good work.
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I like this poem a lot.
It's a very sensual poem. And the phrases "cool rain" and "wet earth" blend two elements of nature in a very nice way.
"bluebell bends to smell" creates a nice visual, though it feels not quite as striking as the rest of the poem.
Good work.
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Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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In haiku there's a juxtaposition between line two and three. The flowers bend to smell the wet soil... it's called metaphor.
Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, After the Cool Rain, has the right set up and finds a particular blossom that loves the earthy odors of the wonderful woods.
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This 5-7-5, After the Cool Rain, has the right set up and finds a particular blossom that loves the earthy odors of the wonderful woods.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent 575 poem with an image of the bluebell bending to smell the fragrance from the wet earth. you have matched your words with the image very well. Good luck in the contest. Bill
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Excellent 575 poem with an image of the bluebell bending to smell the fragrance from the wet earth. you have matched your words with the image very well. Good luck in the contest. Bill
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Comment Written 29-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review