Colorful Covenant
From Noah's time 'til today...13 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem. I like the imagery you used in it and the relationship with the original text is very clear. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Nice poem. I like the imagery you used in it and the relationship with the original text is very clear. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thanks much, Oliver!
Comment from QC Poet
I Remember Genesis 9:13 regarding the rainbow every time I get to See one after a rain. All Faith 5-7-5 requirements nicely met with your postings lovely accompanying picture. Blessings to you and Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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I Remember Genesis 9:13 regarding the rainbow every time I get to See one after a rain. All Faith 5-7-5 requirements nicely met with your postings lovely accompanying picture. Blessings to you and Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Many thanks, QC - so wonderful of you to stop by!
Comment from Mary Furlong
Nicely done. Isn't it amazing how much can be packed into a Haiku. You really added to the effect with an alliterative title that caught my attention.
You have persuaded me. I didn't catch the inferences the first time.
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reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Nicely done. Isn't it amazing how much can be packed into a Haiku. You really added to the effect with an alliterative title that caught my attention.
You have persuaded me. I didn't catch the inferences the first time.
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Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you for your review, but this is not a haiku. :) :) According to the site's rating system, four stars means, by definition, that a post needs corrections or adjustments. However, you have neither listed nor suggested any here. Could you please be specific about what needs adjusting or correcting? If you marked it four stars because it does not fit the haiku definition, please note that this is not a haiku contest. ;) ;) Thank you for fairly adhering to the rating system. And thank you for your time.
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Sorry I was unclear. What I failed to include was my feeling that the first line of the poem was confusing. I'm not sure how it relates to the rest. A Haiku is a poem with a 5-7-5 syllable pattern. I don't know why FanStory sometimes calls it one thing and sometimes another.
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I see that you are not up on current cultural standards such as 'pride parades' and leprechauns and their pots of gold... perfectly understandable that the first line would be unclear. :) ;) And a haiku does not have to have 5-7-5 syllable count. I would suggest, perhaps, you check out Gypsy Blue Rose here as she is a member of the Haiku Society of America... many of her offerings are not 5-7-5, but they are certainly 'haiku' by definition (which she carefully spells out in nearly all of her author notes). A 5-7-5 poem is entitled such because it is just that, a poem with a specific syllable count. It has no 'kigo' or other haiku-specific requirements.
Thank you again for your review.
