Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Success and Havoc"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
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Comment from damommy
Oh, dear. It's starting to happen. Problems for the dragons. It will be so sad if they're separated from Aaron forever. I hope there will be a remedy soon, and they can all stay safely together.
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Oh, dear. It's starting to happen. Problems for the dragons. It will be so sad if they're separated from Aaron forever. I hope there will be a remedy soon, and they can all stay safely together.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks. The palace might not be the best place for the dragons, but he won't abandon them forever. He'll figure something out.
Comment from JudyE
Poor Brown. However, no wonder the girl was frightened. I'm guessing it was the Princess.
Just a few comments:
Maybe it's me but I don't understand where the fish came from. Why doesn't the cook know what it costs?
I know this is not the way things have been, but the way things have been have led us to this. I need to know what is needed, who has it, and then establish trade. You may speak freely. - speech marks needed around this paragraph. And I think it should be 'has led us to this'
"You can't go back to the cabin right now," Aaron told Brown, but perhaps you could visit Purple for a couple of days. Would you like that? I bet Purple would." - speech marks needed before 'but'
Stay safe
Judy
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Poor Brown. However, no wonder the girl was frightened. I'm guessing it was the Princess.
Just a few comments:
Maybe it's me but I don't understand where the fish came from. Why doesn't the cook know what it costs?
I know this is not the way things have been, but the way things have been have led us to this. I need to know what is needed, who has it, and then establish trade. You may speak freely. - speech marks needed around this paragraph. And I think it should be 'has led us to this'
"You can't go back to the cabin right now," Aaron told Brown, but perhaps you could visit Purple for a couple of days. Would you like that? I bet Purple would." - speech marks needed before 'but'
Stay safe
Judy
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks for the catch. I'm assuming the cook didn't buy the fish, but perhaps I should add a line to that effect.
Comment from richie b
Cindy,
This is the first chapter of your novel that I have read,
this is my 2nd week on this site.
I enjoyed this work, good imagery with the dragons and
the fight scene with the maid.
Your book appears enjoyable and entertaining.
Peace,
Richie b
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Cindy,
This is the first chapter of your novel that I have read,
this is my 2nd week on this site.
I enjoyed this work, good imagery with the dragons and
the fight scene with the maid.
Your book appears enjoyable and entertaining.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks, and welcome to FS. Glad you enjoyed the chapter, tho you came into the book near the end. The other chapters are all available in my portfolio.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Fantastic is this fantasy fiction, I enjoyed the taletelling, the free flow of thoughts, the balanced plot development, the climax, but I could not enjoy the beginning for it has a little catch to hook me, I like the character of princess, realistic dialogues, conclusive ending with a unwise view of a havoc creating dragon about human beings; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Fantastic is this fantasy fiction, I enjoyed the taletelling, the free flow of thoughts, the balanced plot development, the climax, but I could not enjoy the beginning for it has a little catch to hook me, I like the character of princess, realistic dialogues, conclusive ending with a unwise view of a havoc creating dragon about human beings; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks. The beginning was a continuation of another chapter. Glad you enjoyed the scene with the dragons.
Comment from royowen
Just liked the metaphor behind this refreshing, not everyone that is big a scary likes to be big and scary, they just want to fit like anyone else, the trouble is, perceptions are different from reality, and not everything appears to be what it appears to be, but it's not insoluble, well done Cindy, everybody that reads you will see something different, and that's what writing is all about, well done good job,I've read you before, good scribing, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Just liked the metaphor behind this refreshing, not everyone that is big a scary likes to be big and scary, they just want to fit like anyone else, the trouble is, perceptions are different from reality, and not everything appears to be what it appears to be, but it's not insoluble, well done Cindy, everybody that reads you will see something different, and that's what writing is all about, well done good job,I've read you before, good scribing, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thanks. No, the dragon wasn't trying to be scary, but she's still very young and in a new situation. She's played in the water with people who knew her, and she didn't know she was doing anything wrong.
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Thank you Cindy,