Keep Up with the Joneses
How far will I go19 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Keep Up with the Joneses
by samandlancelot
Hello my friend
Great entry for the Sonnet Poetry Contest. I love the presentation. It may be a good idea to invite the Joneses. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Keep Up with the Joneses
by samandlancelot
Hello my friend
Great entry for the Sonnet Poetry Contest. I love the presentation. It may be a good idea to invite the Joneses. Well done.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy Blue Rose. Let's invite them to our next get-together.
Have a good night.
Patricia
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about people we trust that sometimes disappointed us and we have to make a plan to get them back for the damages they caused, the guillotine sounds like a great plan even just to give them a fright.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about people we trust that sometimes disappointed us and we have to make a plan to get them back for the damages they caused, the guillotine sounds like a great plan even just to give them a fright.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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haha. I like your usefulness for this tool, Sandra. Thank you for your review and feedback.
Patricia
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
As far as I can tell this has all the needed parts of a sonnet. I think it's written well and I like the story you tell. Some of your descriptions are really good and help the reader understand.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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As far as I can tell this has all the needed parts of a sonnet. I think it's written well and I like the story you tell. Some of your descriptions are really good and help the reader understand.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, The Boy Whodunnit.
Comment from Ogden
A bit too farfetched, you should admit, sonnet or not, but an interesting read (for which I earned eighty-two much appreciated member cents).
Best wishes!
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A bit too farfetched, you should admit, sonnet or not, but an interesting read (for which I earned eighty-two much appreciated member cents).
Best wishes!
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Don. I'm glad to help your coffers, and I admit to nothing.
Have a good day.
Patricia
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Your sonnet speaks for itself, Patricia. Thank you for your generosity and good wishes. You enjoy the day, too.
;o)
Don
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A well metered sonnet except for the final line when the meter is slightly off-balance and has an extra syllable. I would just remove the first (the) to fix it. It sounds like there is some deceit going on here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A well metered sonnet except for the final line when the meter is slightly off-balance and has an extra syllable. I would just remove the first (the) to fix it. It sounds like there is some deceit going on here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Dolly,
I appreciate your review and attention to detail. I wonder if the discrepancy in meter and syllable count is a dialect difference. Conveniently is four syllables for me and stressed correctly. I wonder if it's five for you.
conveniently, the felon and the louse
I appreciate your feedback.
Patricia
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You are right Patricia! It is four syllables! But I pronounce it with five, sorry about that, love Dolly x
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I thought that's what it was. Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from kahpot
Makes me feel like I should invite the Joneses over instead of waiting for them to invite themselves, a wonderful sonnet with excellent descriptive words and artwork, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Makes me feel like I should invite the Joneses over instead of waiting for them to invite themselves, a wonderful sonnet with excellent descriptive words and artwork, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Kahpot. I appreciate your review and comments.
Patricia
Comment from DeboraDyess
Yikes! I think I'll let the Jones' go ahead of me, thank you very much! lol
The poem was well written. It ws't always easy to read with the abbreviated words, but they were right for the poem. Well Done!
Blessings, health and peace to you and yours,
Deb
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Yikes! I think I'll let the Jones' go ahead of me, thank you very much! lol
The poem was well written. It ws't always easy to read with the abbreviated words, but they were right for the poem. Well Done!
Blessings, health and peace to you and yours,
Deb
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Deb. I appreciate your review and comments.
Patricia
Comment from Ross E Silke
Wow, that thing is dangerous, lol. I wouldn't want to get on the wrong side. An interesting and effective poem and presentation. I like the last couplets and your end rhyme 'louse' works well. A pleasure to read although I'm a little spooked at the moment, lol. Good poem with lots of well written descriptions. Style, syntax, grammar, and sentence structure is sound. Good diction. I also like your use of " ' " the apostrophe to omit letters to make the words fit. A
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reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Wow, that thing is dangerous, lol. I wouldn't want to get on the wrong side. An interesting and effective poem and presentation. I like the last couplets and your end rhyme 'louse' works well. A pleasure to read although I'm a little spooked at the moment, lol. Good poem with lots of well written descriptions. Style, syntax, grammar, and sentence structure is sound. Good diction. I also like your use of " ' " the apostrophe to omit letters to make the words fit. A
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Ross. I appreciate your many comments and review.
Patricia
Comment from Drew Delaney
Wow! I wouldn't care to have that device in my house or anywhere near. Yes, if we have anything worth stealing, thieves could very well steal. This sonnet is very well written. I am just learning the form so I am not a good judge but it reads very well.
Drew xx
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reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Wow! I wouldn't care to have that device in my house or anywhere near. Yes, if we have anything worth stealing, thieves could very well steal. This sonnet is very well written. I am just learning the form so I am not a good judge but it reads very well.
Drew xx
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Drew. The Sonnet is a fun form to write and read.
Have a good day.
Patricia