Oh Deer, I'm Fawn of You
A young deer visits my side yard.31 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Beth, I live near several wooded areas, and deer are spotted often before argh: hunting season. The photo above is very beautiful. I like your poem, you seem to be a nature lover. You express it well in your words. Excellent work. Best wishes today and always.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Beth, I live near several wooded areas, and deer are spotted often before argh: hunting season. The photo above is very beautiful. I like your poem, you seem to be a nature lover. You express it well in your words. Excellent work. Best wishes today and always.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I am a nature lover and definitely an animal lover.
Beth
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, interesting, clear and creative.
The author words conveys the beauty of nature with her love for it as well.
The artwork goes so well with this poem.
Have a great day!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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The author's words are descriptive, interesting, clear and creative.
The author words conveys the beauty of nature with her love for it as well.
The artwork goes so well with this poem.
Have a great day!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I could make mental images as I read. We, do have many deer in our neighborhood. We're right on the edge of town. Deer seem to tease my husband. LOL Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It flowed smoothly and I could make mental images as I read. We, do have many deer in our neighborhood. We're right on the edge of town. Deer seem to tease my husband. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you Barbara, I'm glad you liked my poem. The deer seem to tease my dog. She doesn't know whether she is supposed to bark or run.
Beth
Comment from smileycloud
very interesting and well written poem
the word imagery is excellent...I was on your property with you the entire time
love the title...really whimsical
your pictured image is also great
I know you might be in America and that you have lots of words over there spelled differently to us here in Australia but I was just wondering about "foliage" and the "follage" in your poem ....is that another one of those unique words we spell differently
like cheque and check or tyre and tire
here cheque is the money one and check is to check something out
our car tyres but your car tires here means to tire out when over exhausted ....funny hey
blessings
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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very interesting and well written poem
the word imagery is excellent...I was on your property with you the entire time
love the title...really whimsical
your pictured image is also great
I know you might be in America and that you have lots of words over there spelled differently to us here in Australia but I was just wondering about "foliage" and the "follage" in your poem ....is that another one of those unique words we spell differently
like cheque and check or tyre and tire
here cheque is the money one and check is to check something out
our car tyres but your car tires here means to tire out when over exhausted ....funny hey
blessings
have a smiley day
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review and lovely comments. You are correct about the work foliage. Evidently it is a word that is misspelled a lot. I looked it up and the net listed many Follage plants for sale.
Beth LOL
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it is difficult for us when even the net can have differing ideas of the English language
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Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
You did a smashing job with both the poem and the picture of the fawn. Venison is a good meat to eat since it is virtually fat free. You need to add fat so doesn't dry out when cooking. Well written!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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You did a smashing job with both the poem and the picture of the fawn. Venison is a good meat to eat since it is virtually fat free. You need to add fat so doesn't dry out when cooking. Well written!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. There is only a brief time in November when hunters are allowed to kill deer and only males. In my neighborhood we aren't supposed to shoot firearms so these deer with be free to roam.
Beth
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That's good.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Sorry, Beth! I have no more sixes. And you so earned them with this lovely poem. A contest poem, with a perfectly followed rhyme scheme, a beautiful photo, and an interesting description of your lucky hunt and fabulous fawn.
Hope you win!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Sorry, Beth! I have no more sixes. And you so earned them with this lovely poem. A contest poem, with a perfectly followed rhyme scheme, a beautiful photo, and an interesting description of your lucky hunt and fabulous fawn.
Hope you win!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments and good wishes and for the virtual six stars. I'm pleased you thought this was worth it.
Beth
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I love deer. They are so beautiful. Looks like Bambi.
Comment from Sankey
This was agreat poem. Great rhyme in the long lines. I hope you win something. Loved the photo is that yours or?? Only one possible change suggested. Now I must summon[s] my muse,
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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This was agreat poem. Great rhyme in the long lines. I hope you win something. Loved the photo is that yours or?? Only one possible change suggested. Now I must summon[s] my muse,
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank for the review and comments. Yes I took the photo. I was a long way off so I managed to get about five of him before he ran. I had to zoom in.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(summons s/b summon; follage s/b foliage...in my robe IN my gown...AND?) This is delightful--whimsical, with fresh imagery and alliteration--sun silent stalker peering through cloud-tossed breeze...Cheers. LIZ
Beth--back with congrats! I thought this would win. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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(summons s/b summon; follage s/b foliage...in my robe IN my gown...AND?) This is delightful--whimsical, with fresh imagery and alliteration--sun silent stalker peering through cloud-tossed breeze...Cheers. LIZ
Beth--back with congrats! I thought this would win. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Liz, I appreciate the review and comments and for catching my typos and misspellings.
Beth
Comment from Puzzle
This is written so well. We see see deer every now and then run across the expressway. We live in the city and sometimes they come out of the forest preserve and get lost. They are so beautiful. You are so lucky they are right in your yard!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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This is written so well. We see see deer every now and then run across the expressway. We live in the city and sometimes they come out of the forest preserve and get lost. They are so beautiful. You are so lucky they are right in your yard!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank os much for the review and comments. That is dangerous when deer cross and expressway. They cause wrecks. Be careful.
Beth
Comment from June Sargent
What a perfect subject you found in your walk! Bambi! I'm glad she didn't see you. The photograph was perfect and your poem brought it to life. Great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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What a perfect subject you found in your walk! Bambi! I'm glad she didn't see you. The photograph was perfect and your poem brought it to life. Great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much June. I appreciate the review.
Beth
