Why Do You Eat?
Who will win the battle?15 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Is this the explanation for the hunger? Could be, but I like your explanation better: "We cannot control
hunger when emotions drive
sweet tooth's victory"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Is this the explanation for the hunger? Could be, but I like your explanation better: "We cannot control
hunger when emotions drive
sweet tooth's victory"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Iza. I appreciate your review and encouragement.
Patricia
Comment from Puzzle
Hahaha yes!!!! This is true! This is a great contest entry! I counted your syllables and you nailed the format. Your choice of subject matter is relatable as wel. Great job!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Hahaha yes!!!! This is true! This is a great contest entry! I counted your syllables and you nailed the format. Your choice of subject matter is relatable as wel. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Puzzle. I appreciate your review and encouragement.
Patricia
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like this well written poem that expresses the idea that uncontrolled eating can be driven by emotions that are destructive. Thanks for sharing and keep safe. Bill
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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I like this well written poem that expresses the idea that uncontrolled eating can be driven by emotions that are destructive. Thanks for sharing and keep safe. Bill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Bill. I appreciate your review and feedback.
Patricia
Comment from Cindy Decker
I like your poem, though I have never heard of senryu. You have followed the 5-7-5 format and the message is very clear. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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I like your poem, though I have never heard of senryu. You have followed the 5-7-5 format and the message is very clear. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Cindy. I appreciate your review and feedback.
Patricia
Comment from January L'Angelle
No we can't! At least, I can't! I love the hilarious photo of a marshmallow face. During this time when we all must stay in our homes... food, especially sweet snacks are like a main staple. I loved that this poem is timely and really hits home. Well done. -January L.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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No we can't! At least, I can't! I love the hilarious photo of a marshmallow face. During this time when we all must stay in our homes... food, especially sweet snacks are like a main staple. I loved that this poem is timely and really hits home. Well done. -January L.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thank you, January. I'm glad you related to the poem (not that I wish your sweet tooth wins the battle). I appreciate your comments.
Patricia