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Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Good chapter! I enjoyed this one and I'm glad they are finally getting to the part where they see they belong together as a couple. Kudos on that. Yay!
Some notes, if I may:
1.) He kissed McKenzie's cheek. "See you probably later today. Tomorrow morning for sure. What time you going to the hospital?"
Logan pointed to McKenzie. "Any idea?"
--> since the first guy was directly focused on Mac to begin with, I didn't see the need for Logan to have to speak here or to point to her...
2.) "I do(, too)." He pushed her behind him
Thanks!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Barbara,
Good chapter! I enjoyed this one and I'm glad they are finally getting to the part where they see they belong together as a couple. Kudos on that. Yay!
Some notes, if I may:
1.) He kissed McKenzie's cheek. "See you probably later today. Tomorrow morning for sure. What time you going to the hospital?"
Logan pointed to McKenzie. "Any idea?"
--> since the first guy was directly focused on Mac to begin with, I didn't see the need for Logan to have to speak here or to point to her...
2.) "I do(, too)." He pushed her behind him
Thanks!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the help. I made the corrections.
Comment from RShipp
"You kissed me last night." ... "I did, twice." ... She restarted with a slow jog. "Why?" ... "Because I wanted to." ... McKenzie was at a full run. "I guess that's as good a reason as any."
I loved that direct conversation.
Well done. I enjoyed the story as usual!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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"You kissed me last night." ... "I did, twice." ... She restarted with a slow jog. "Why?" ... "Because I wanted to." ... McKenzie was at a full run. "I guess that's as good a reason as any."
I loved that direct conversation.
Well done. I enjoyed the story as usual!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Patrick is appreciate of Mac and Logan's visit to his hospital room. He does have some important information. He mentions that there were three persons involved, and although they wore masks he might be able to identify the voice of one of them. Mark turns up at the gym. He seems to know a lot about Mac's security issues. Wonder why? Now you have me all anxious at the end of this. What's gone wrong when they get to Mac's house? Can I wait a week to find out? In your last sentence, I don't think you need the comma between him and as. judi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Patrick is appreciate of Mac and Logan's visit to his hospital room. He does have some important information. He mentions that there were three persons involved, and although they wore masks he might be able to identify the voice of one of them. Mark turns up at the gym. He seems to know a lot about Mac's security issues. Wonder why? Now you have me all anxious at the end of this. What's gone wrong when they get to Mac's house? Can I wait a week to find out? In your last sentence, I don't think you need the comma between him and as. judi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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I will recheck that sentence. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello barbara.wilkey
I had a good time reading when McKenzie and Logan working out, until Logan and McKenzie when they were walking up the sidewalk--- said "Something's wrong. I can feel it." So once again you are leaving me in suspense.
Gert
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Hello barbara.wilkey
I had a good time reading when McKenzie and Logan working out, until Logan and McKenzie when they were walking up the sidewalk--- said "Something's wrong. I can feel it." So once again you are leaving me in suspense.
Gert
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Once again a great chapter. No pages and an excellent read.Moving right along. Leaving us hanging in the suspense department as usual. Keep 'em coming.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Once again a great chapter. No pages and an excellent read.Moving right along. Leaving us hanging in the suspense department as usual. Keep 'em coming.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
Another great chapter. You do a wonderful job with the dialogue of all the character. It always seems natural and not at all forced. I'll be waiting anxiously for the next episode since I want to know what happens when they enter the apartment.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Another great chapter. You do a wonderful job with the dialogue of all the character. It always seems natural and not at all forced. I'll be waiting anxiously for the next episode since I want to know what happens when they enter the apartment.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, I don't mind the length-- more would be better! You like leaving off on cliffhangers, and leave me wanting more. This will be a great book when it is finished.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Oh, I don't mind the length-- more would be better! You like leaving off on cliffhangers, and leave me wanting more. This will be a great book when it is finished.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Barbara, you left us on a cliff hanger here. Everything is so peaceful in this chapter until the last two sentences. I love the story and I found nothing to correct. Looking out for what is next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Wow, Barbara, you left us on a cliff hanger here. Everything is so peaceful in this chapter until the last two sentences. I love the story and I found nothing to correct. Looking out for what is next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from royowen
Have you posted another earlier? don't worry I'll get to it. This is a wonderful one, McKenzie doesn't seem to mind, Logan kissing her, "I wanted to" He says. They've had a workout at the gym, I've done that in the past, we can't at the moment, we have lockdown. Well done, great episode, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Have you posted another earlier? don't worry I'll get to it. This is a wonderful one, McKenzie doesn't seem to mind, Logan kissing her, "I wanted to" He says. They've had a workout at the gym, I've done that in the past, we can't at the moment, we have lockdown. Well done, great episode, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2020
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Lock down has put an end to my water aerobics too. DARN!! Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done
