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Old Trixie

Sometimes tales of the past can help the present.

23 total reviews 
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This is a very poignant story. It is limited in scope, imagery and sensations because of the limitation of word count. You have done a fine job in spite of it.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you for your honest review. I?m usually very wordy in my prose. I took the challenge of 50 words to see if I could make sense in so few words.
    Thanks again!
Comment from Coco Jane
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Good story!
Is Paul troubled, or maybe it is his daughters who are troubled? Just something to think about.
In para 1, "every" should be "ever."
Maybe para 1 and 2 should be just one big paragraph.
Nice ending.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you so much for the helpful review. I went back and made some changes. I hope it?s clearer now.
Comment from LisaMay
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This is a charming tale with a message for modern times. It relies on the photo and your backstory for us to know that Trixie, the babysitter, was a dog, but your 50 words are well told. There is one small correction to fix in this line: "only babysitter my mother every(drop the y) had. "

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you for the great review, and for finding the spam. You?re great!
Comment from zanya
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Yes an interesting angle on the problems life throws at us - let's look back and see how other generations got through the tough times - let's hope this particular tough time passes soon- thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Yes, I hope it does. I told my kids that every generation has its crisis, this one belongs to the Millennials. I hope they can dig us out of this mess.
    Thanks for getting the deeper message behind this short story.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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I've read them all and this back story is as good as the actual story. I did see the one word "ever[y]" that should be ever. Good luck in this contest. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you for the wonderful review, Kiwi, and for finding the Spag on ever. Funny how many times you can read the same word and still miss the mistake.
    Again, much thanks.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Very innovative, I must say. There is something about dogs that mystifies me. If they are a beast, how come they are so clever. They really are a dependable species. Sometimes, more dependable than man.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    I completely agree. In some ways, dogs show more sense than we do. Thanks for taking time to review!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Old Trixie

Hello, my friend,

a beautiful little story about the family dog, the perfect babysitter. I know dogs are more loyal than most people. Your word count is right. Well done.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Gypsy. I appreciate the review and comments. Dogs are great!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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What a topic for the contest--love it. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading your entry. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. I could 'see' Trixie protecting her family. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Jan, for your personable review. I?m glad the message made it through the extensive editing process. Take care.
Comment from Bichon
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This was a very sweet short story. Dogs are not only the best friends, but can be the best minders too. The positive message within was lovely to read too!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    Thank you for taking time to read and review, my friend. Sometimes my dogs behave better than my kids. Take care.
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
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Thanks for the fifty word story. I'm wondering if "Trixie" was real in your life. My brothers and I never had a babysitter. Overcoming adversities in life though tough at times, will strengthen us for future battles. Good Luck!!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2020

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
    The character was my father, and Trixie was their dog. I should add more about her in the Author?s notes.

    Thanks so much for your review.