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Comment from Janet Foor
A thoughtful haiku Spangle. One that gives one pause as we contemplate our blessings in our abundant life. Well done and good luck in the contest.
~Janet
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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A thoughtful haiku Spangle. One that gives one pause as we contemplate our blessings in our abundant life. Well done and good luck in the contest.
~Janet
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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I have worked with many people with special needs. It influences a lot of my writings and I appreciate your kind review very much.
Blessings, from me--another Janet :-)
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes, we often forget how hard it is for some to enjoy the simple things of life. Maybe we should pick some flowers for them so they can touch them.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Yes, we often forget how hard it is for some to enjoy the simple things of life. Maybe we should pick some flowers for them so they can touch them.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, dragonpoet. You make a super suggestion. :-)
--Janet
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My pleasure, Janet.
Joan
Comment from samandlancelot
Spangle,
You've painted a vivid picture with your word within the picture of a wheelchair wheel. Very creative presentation. A simple scene that you made come to life, with strong feelings of loss for simple things in life toward the one in the wheelchair.
Excellent!
Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Spangle,
You've painted a vivid picture with your word within the picture of a wheelchair wheel. Very creative presentation. A simple scene that you made come to life, with strong feelings of loss for simple things in life toward the one in the wheelchair.
Excellent!
Patricia
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Your review is truly appreciated, Patricia. I love doing the artwork as much as the writing. Thank you for your super comments!
--Janet
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Spangle
In so few syllables you wrote your haiku. describes how frustrated when one is in wheel chair to try and reach something on the ground.
I hope a caring person picked up the rose.
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Hello Spangle
In so few syllables you wrote your haiku. describes how frustrated when one is in wheel chair to try and reach something on the ground.
I hope a caring person picked up the rose.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I appreciate your kind review, Gert. Caring people are jewels and I'm always glad when they're around. Thankfully, I'm not in a wheelchair...yet. lol But I have worked with a lot of other people who were, however. Thank you for your comments! --Janet
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You are so welcome Spangle (Janet)
Gert
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning write in its deviation from the standard haiku - beautifully rendered in both verse and image - a testimony to the resilience and tenacity of the human spirit and this writer's understanding of this. Best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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In my opinion, a stunning write in its deviation from the standard haiku - beautifully rendered in both verse and image - a testimony to the resilience and tenacity of the human spirit and this writer's understanding of this. Best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Eve. I truly appreciate your support of my postings. It means a lot. Smiles, Janet
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You are very welcome, my dear Janet, my pleasure I assure you...Eve
Comment from Patty Palmer
Being in a wheelchair is more difficult than people think, You can't get close enough to a table to eat without spilling halfway between your plate and your mouth. It's difficult to navigate around things, If you drop something, you can't reach it. And you can't touch your toes, but struggle you may but you'll work like heck to lean over to touch that rose.
I only know all of this from being in a wheelchair for several months, years ago.
Luv ya!
Patty
Nice to see you Spangle!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Being in a wheelchair is more difficult than people think, You can't get close enough to a table to eat without spilling halfway between your plate and your mouth. It's difficult to navigate around things, If you drop something, you can't reach it. And you can't touch your toes, but struggle you may but you'll work like heck to lean over to touch that rose.
I only know all of this from being in a wheelchair for several months, years ago.
Luv ya!
Patty
Nice to see you Spangle!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your review is very meaningful, Patty, especially because you've personally aware of the situation. I hope things are going well for you. It is always difficult to give up one's independence in any way.
♥♥
Janet
Comment from estory
An interesting use of this form, I think you created a great sense of the frustration of reaching out and we get that movement of the wheel turning in the first line, as well as the frustrations of reaching. That poignant last image of the rose, her object of craving, is really strong. That makes the poem, I think. We really see her here reaching out for that rose. estory
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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An interesting use of this form, I think you created a great sense of the frustration of reaching out and we get that movement of the wheel turning in the first line, as well as the frustrations of reaching. That poignant last image of the rose, her object of craving, is really strong. That makes the poem, I think. We really see her here reaching out for that rose. estory
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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The Japanese short forms are my favorite forms of poetry and I'm so glad you wanted to review this one and share your thoughts. Thank you so much! --Janet
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Spangle, a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem, many of us take for granted doing things like picking a flower, that those who are disabled or in wheelchairs can't do. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Hello Spangle, a terrific Tuesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem, many of us take for granted doing things like picking a flower, that those who are disabled or in wheelchairs can't do. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much...your comments are truly appreciated. Smiles!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This describes so well, what it must be like to be confined to a wheelchair. She struggles earnestly, to lean over and not just see, but touch a rose. The desire, the need to feel fulfilled in life, never is more poignant, than when it becomes more difficult to connect with the world surrounding you. To reach out to living plants, to touch beauty, with the thorns attached to the elegance of a rose, represents the awareness of life's struggles and painful times, as well as the good, precious times. This minimal haiku packs a powerful message. Thank you for sharing your willingness to open our eyes to other ways of life and what they experience.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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This describes so well, what it must be like to be confined to a wheelchair. She struggles earnestly, to lean over and not just see, but touch a rose. The desire, the need to feel fulfilled in life, never is more poignant, than when it becomes more difficult to connect with the world surrounding you. To reach out to living plants, to touch beauty, with the thorns attached to the elegance of a rose, represents the awareness of life's struggles and painful times, as well as the good, precious times. This minimal haiku packs a powerful message. Thank you for sharing your willingness to open our eyes to other ways of life and what they experience.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your beautifully expressed review is truly heartwarming, Jesse. Thank you so very much! Smiles, Janet
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Hello Janet.
You're very welcome, and thank you for appreciating my review.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Alchera
Thirteen syllables, sufficient to modernize the Japanese traditional haiku with a slight taste of senryu within its format. I, too, think that any subject could be freely enclosed in seventeen syllables or less. Your idea is really great due to its leaning over the wheelchair that few people succeed in doing it and I well know it on my past life experience within the family.
Your 2/7/4 format works perfectly here: input shot image/ human action/natural vision. A great perfect visual written provocative thought!
I really appreciated it all! Sorry, but I have no six left.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thirteen syllables, sufficient to modernize the Japanese traditional haiku with a slight taste of senryu within its format. I, too, think that any subject could be freely enclosed in seventeen syllables or less. Your idea is really great due to its leaning over the wheelchair that few people succeed in doing it and I well know it on my past life experience within the family.
Your 2/7/4 format works perfectly here: input shot image/ human action/natural vision. A great perfect visual written provocative thought!
I really appreciated it all! Sorry, but I have no six left.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your virtual six is received with much gratitude, Alchera. Thank you for this excellent study of the posting. I'm so glad to know the depth of it is coming through. Big smiles, Janet
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It has been a pleasure Janet!
You will always be welcomed! Blessings from Italy. Tony