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Comment from Sankey
Another good read, again. I feel like this is some kind of "joining" chapter? Just a couple of possible spags or needing some changes. he can't contain him(self)."
I guess I'd better wait [and](to) talk with his wife
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Another good read, again. I feel like this is some kind of "joining" chapter? Just a couple of possible spags or needing some changes. he can't contain him(self)."
I guess I'd better wait [and](to) talk with his wife
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I made both corrections. I always appreciate the help. Thank you.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this episode of your story. Your use of dialogue moves the story along nicely. I wonder if there is a reason that McKenzie wants to go to the nature center. I look forward to your next entry.
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I enjoyed this episode of your story. Your use of dialogue moves the story along nicely. I wonder if there is a reason that McKenzie wants to go to the nature center. I look forward to your next entry.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, as usual you've written a very good chapter. I just don't know if Bill has more of an interest in Mac than he lets on. Of course, only time can tell. I'm waiting for more. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Hi Barbara, as usual you've written a very good chapter. I just don't know if Bill has more of an interest in Mac than he lets on. Of course, only time can tell. I'm waiting for more. Ulla xx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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You're the second person to comment on Bill. Interesting. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great job with this chapter as they continue their relationship and also continue to pursue the murderer. The characters and interactions are very believable. Congratulations on your book that's published! Bill
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Great job with this chapter as they continue their relationship and also continue to pursue the murderer. The characters and interactions are very believable. Congratulations on your book that's published! Bill
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I'm probably getting way off base, but I keep questioning Bill. He is just concerned about Mac's safety, or is there another agenda? He has to know all the details of what she's doing for the day. With Logan receiving a call about a young office in some trouble, I wonder if that means he'll have to report back, leaving Mac alone. Funny about Arlo barking if someone's at the door and wagging his tale if it's someone he likes. Great work with the characters. Mac and Logan really seem comfortable together now. I have my suspicions that something may happen on that walk. judi
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I'm probably getting way off base, but I keep questioning Bill. He is just concerned about Mac's safety, or is there another agenda? He has to know all the details of what she's doing for the day. With Logan receiving a call about a young office in some trouble, I wonder if that means he'll have to report back, leaving Mac alone. Funny about Arlo barking if someone's at the door and wagging his tale if it's someone he likes. Great work with the characters. Mac and Logan really seem comfortable together now. I have my suspicions that something may happen on that walk. judi
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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The plot is getting ready to really thicken. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. I'll be tuned in to see how things develop. judi
Comment from royowen
I like the comfortable way you plot these Barbara, they are very "homey" there is great order in your plots, your characters are likewise, but very feisty, particularly the women, but good, strong, virtuous men, like Logan, Bill and Jose', but you contrast them with very devious antagonists, a great episode Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Laughing(,) Logan asked.
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I like the comfortable way you plot these Barbara, they are very "homey" there is great order in your plots, your characters are likewise, but very feisty, particularly the women, but good, strong, virtuous men, like Logan, Bill and Jose', but you contrast them with very devious antagonists, a great episode Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Laughing(,) Logan asked.
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you and I will add that comma.
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Well done
