haiku (revival)
winter haiku in 5-7-518 total reviews
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well-written poem for the flower 575 contest. The flower peeking through the soil helps me realize that spring will be coming soon.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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This is a well-written poem for the flower 575 contest. The flower peeking through the soil helps me realize that spring will be coming soon.
Great job! Thank you for sharing and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Dancemom, thanks for another lovely comment!
Comment from Sallyo
Clever! I'm always puzzled by these flowers that bloom in winter. I mean--why? No bees, too much frost and snow. There must be a scientific reason. And yes, I suppose the fit have evolved to do this.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Clever! I'm always puzzled by these flowers that bloom in winter. I mean--why? No bees, too much frost and snow. There must be a scientific reason. And yes, I suppose the fit have evolved to do this.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Sallyo. Yes, brave little snowdrop also impressed me by popping up so unexpected.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
survival of the fittest indeed -- and such a sweet name as Snowdrop -- it's always the tiny ones to keep your eye on! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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survival of the fittest indeed -- and such a sweet name as Snowdrop -- it's always the tiny ones to keep your eye on! :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Yvette! Thanks again. Snowdrop popped into my mind for a flower 5-7-5. It also is fitting for a haiku and gives a perfect winter impression.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
I like your 5/7/5 poem contest entry. Pretty picture and presentation. Your syllable count is off one.
icy fros/ted soil
sur/vi/val of the fit/test
brave snow/drop peeps=4 syllables
good job and good luck
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend,
I like your 5/7/5 poem contest entry. Pretty picture and presentation. Your syllable count is off one.
icy fros/ted soil
sur/vi/val of the fit/test
brave snow/drop peeps=4 syllables
good job and good luck
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy Blue Rose, for seeing the counting error. I repaired the dammage.
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Oh good. No worries, it happens to all of us.
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It was meant to read: bravest snow drop peeps. Well, thanks anyway!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective.
-There is good description
of the winter soil, as well
as the impact in line two.
-The last line is a good satori.
-A very good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective.
-There is good description
of the winter soil, as well
as the impact in line two.
-The last line is a good satori.
-A very good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the alert in the counting! I repaired the damage.
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You are very welcome, and you did a good job. I revised the review for you.
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Oh! How very kind. Thank you so much
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You are very welcome.
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:)
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:) :)
Comment from rspoet
You've written and excellent poem for the contest,
but I only count four syllables in the last line. (brave snowdrops peeps)
Good imagery in the other lines and very good picture to match
You'd be better off just calling it a 5-7-5 rather than a haiku
where there are many rules.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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You've written and excellent poem for the contest,
but I only count four syllables in the last line. (brave snowdrops peeps)
Good imagery in the other lines and very good picture to match
You'd be better off just calling it a 5-7-5 rather than a haiku
where there are many rules.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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RS Poet, thank you, The careless counting did cost me points. I repaired!
Comment from LisaMay
I love the bravery of the snowdrop - the photo is gorgeous. Your well executed haiku is a metaphor for suffering the bleak times of life and finding the strength and bravery to peep, then rise above and shine.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I love the bravery of the snowdrop - the photo is gorgeous. Your well executed haiku is a metaphor for suffering the bleak times of life and finding the strength and bravery to peep, then rise above and shine.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Lisa, thank you so much! Much appreciated comment.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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13th poet, Thanks for the comment!