Secret Memories
Free Verse26 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
I think everyone will relate to this poem and be transported to those moments we have spent "on the edge of silence' (great line!) - nothing does that better than being in the presence of something vast (we don't have an ocean here in Chicago, so we settle for Lake Michigan). There is indeed something seductive about those moments and it's hard to tear oneself away.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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I think everyone will relate to this poem and be transported to those moments we have spent "on the edge of silence' (great line!) - nothing does that better than being in the presence of something vast (we don't have an ocean here in Chicago, so we settle for Lake Michigan). There is indeed something seductive about those moments and it's hard to tear oneself away.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Mark. Thank you very much for the six stars and for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :) so glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Pinder
Melissa, I appreciated all your input from class and now at least I have voice recognition. Great job with your free verse here and keep on writing excellent free verse. Bill
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Melissa, I appreciated all your input from class and now at least I have voice recognition. Great job with your free verse here and keep on writing excellent free verse. Bill
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thank you Bill. I certainly enjoyed getting to know you a bit better... and yes, adding a voice to a photo. I hope we are able to share a class again soon :) Thanks again!!
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about how we can forget about our immediate surroundings when we get lost in memories when we have peace of mind and nature's beauty mesmerized us for awhile.
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A very well-written free verse poem about how we can forget about our immediate surroundings when we get lost in memories when we have peace of mind and nature's beauty mesmerized us for awhile.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Sanda. Thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :)
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
This is just lovely!
His thoughts are too deep, too pensive to
fall for the wiles of the sea.
I love 'secret things on the edge of silence.'
A beautiful entry,
Blessings...
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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This is just lovely!
His thoughts are too deep, too pensive to
fall for the wiles of the sea.
I love 'secret things on the edge of silence.'
A beautiful entry,
Blessings...
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Judy. Thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :) Hugs!!!
Melissa
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A lovely poem!!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very beautiful and vividly expressive, describing the ponderings of one lost for a time in the majesty of nature. It's been several years since I've seen the ocean. I'm ready . . .
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Your poem is very beautiful and vividly expressive, describing the ponderings of one lost for a time in the majesty of nature. It's been several years since I've seen the ocean. I'm ready . . .
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Janice... YES, go to the ocean and submerge yourself in the sounds of the sea. I thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :)
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
It is so easy to get lost in our memories. It's only natural to want to revisit and immerse ourselves in happy places in our lives. But it should not be at the cost of losing touch with the playfulness of the present. We need to embrace that as well. Very nice free verse.
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It is so easy to get lost in our memories. It's only natural to want to revisit and immerse ourselves in happy places in our lives. But it should not be at the cost of losing touch with the playfulness of the present. We need to embrace that as well. Very nice free verse.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello June. First, let me tell you that I am praying for your quick recovery from hip replacement... I know it will take time, but hopefully not too long... Thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :)
Melissa
Comment from Drew Delaney
Beautiful imagery in this well written free verse poem. Also, the alliteration ... tips, tease, toes, seep, seducing, sand. Very nice! I wish you the best in the contest.
Drew
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Beautiful imagery in this well written free verse poem. Also, the alliteration ... tips, tease, toes, seep, seducing, sand. Very nice! I wish you the best in the contest.
Drew
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Drew. Thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :)
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your poem, Melissa! Am glad you entered it into the contest. I like what you did with it - changing to present tense and ending with the sunset.
Best wishes in the contest!
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Enjoyed your poem, Melissa! Am glad you entered it into the contest. I like what you did with it - changing to present tense and ending with the sunset.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thank you Helen... I am grateful for your suggestions and input last night.. it allowed me to look at this from a different perspective. So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
You are getting good at free verse, Melissa, even though I will always think of you as my tanka lady. I like the flow of this one and your use of repetition. As a good example,
"He sits on the edge,
the very edge."
These two lines give your words an ease and authenticity. It's like you are talking right at me.
I enjoyed it. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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You are getting good at free verse, Melissa, even though I will always think of you as my tanka lady. I like the flow of this one and your use of repetition. As a good example,
"He sits on the edge,
the very edge."
These two lines give your words an ease and authenticity. It's like you are talking right at me.
I enjoyed it. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello Debbie. Thank you for your lovely words... this was the final assignment for the FS Free Verse class that wrapped up last night. I thought I would share it with you all. :) I will have to do a Tanka very soon now that my mind can come off a FV focus. ha!
Melissa
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I'll be watching for your tanka.
Comment from royowen
Yes it's true that one can be distracted from the natural goings on around them, I sincerely hope that no tsunami caught him unawares. Excellent art work, and a delightfully wistful subject and narrative for this wonderful offering, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Yes it's true that one can be distracted from the natural goings on around them, I sincerely hope that no tsunami caught him unawares. Excellent art work, and a delightfully wistful subject and narrative for this wonderful offering, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Roy. I really appreciate it. :)
Melissa
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Welcome