Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from skypilot
You know, I have been wondering when you were gonna do a loose meter rhyme again 'cause I don't think I have read one in a while from you, and this one proves that you're still as sharp as ever as you didn't miss a step (or in this case, a word), in changing styles. OK, I can't resist...this is another "jewell."
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You know, I have been wondering when you were gonna do a loose meter rhyme again 'cause I don't think I have read one in a while from you, and this one proves that you're still as sharp as ever as you didn't miss a step (or in this case, a word), in changing styles. OK, I can't resist...this is another "jewell."
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from ishta
Nice. You have done a nice job on this. The only suggestions I would make is still to give your questions marks. I would say that you could have used if in the beginning. Broken english is in I see, but will it hold up over time, I wonder about. Good job either way. Lovely cadence, and pic.
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Nice. You have done a nice job on this. The only suggestions I would make is still to give your questions marks. I would say that you could have used if in the beginning. Broken english is in I see, but will it hold up over time, I wonder about. Good job either way. Lovely cadence, and pic.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from EmileJP
The author sends a simple but powerful message wealth has little value if not spent. Most of us have what we need and few of us are amuiond to greed.
Money is not evil, what people do to get it sometimes is. Shall we go treasure hunting ?... for the treasure does exist. It is the reward that pain offers for those who risk its sting, it is the love found at the end of despair..and it is the wealth found in a soul that cares.Good poem, well penned.
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The author sends a simple but powerful message wealth has little value if not spent. Most of us have what we need and few of us are amuiond to greed.
Money is not evil, what people do to get it sometimes is. Shall we go treasure hunting ?... for the treasure does exist. It is the reward that pain offers for those who risk its sting, it is the love found at the end of despair..and it is the wealth found in a soul that cares.Good poem, well penned.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from judybonin
Great ideas expressed in this poem. Very well put. Would I lose my heart and become full of greed? That is the main question I got from this poem. Great work! Judy
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Great ideas expressed in this poem. Very well put. Would I lose my heart and become full of greed? That is the main question I got from this poem. Great work! Judy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from Monet Mama
Another good one, Eyes. How many times I have asked myself these very questions!! I think the hearts of those who have suffered and been hungry, those who have seen how money (even a little) can lift burdens that joy alone cannot affect, and who have experienced the cruelty of the greedy, have a genuine connection to others who can benefit from their generosity. Rest assured, you would do a lot of good things with sudden wealth, I'm sure of it!
Only one line was off for me--"more than silver or gold known." It just read a little forced. Other than that, excellent! I especially liked "I have suffered like a street bum/I have hungered as a child." The two stanzas "Tears have" and "I've watched" I loved, as well.
Always a pleasure.
Mama
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Another good one, Eyes. How many times I have asked myself these very questions!! I think the hearts of those who have suffered and been hungry, those who have seen how money (even a little) can lift burdens that joy alone cannot affect, and who have experienced the cruelty of the greedy, have a genuine connection to others who can benefit from their generosity. Rest assured, you would do a lot of good things with sudden wealth, I'm sure of it!
Only one line was off for me--"more than silver or gold known." It just read a little forced. Other than that, excellent! I especially liked "I have suffered like a street bum/I have hungered as a child." The two stanzas "Tears have" and "I've watched" I loved, as well.
Always a pleasure.
Mama
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from Margokatt
LOVE IT. . .but I hate to burst your bubble. . .you will never be a rich *man*. . .
who loves ya!??? ..............................................................this was a nice spin. . .enjoyed the flow and the rhythm! Great JOB! MK
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LOVE IT. . .but I hate to burst your bubble. . .you will never be a rich *man*. . .
who loves ya!??? ..............................................................this was a nice spin. . .enjoyed the flow and the rhythm! Great JOB! MK
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from darlene snyder
Words of wisdom. Very nicley written and a joy to read. Your words flowed well...I enjoyed this one very much. What would I do? Hum, I would like to think I would not be greedy...never have been, but never really had that kind of money either....money seems to do strange things to people.
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Words of wisdom. Very nicley written and a joy to read. Your words flowed well...I enjoyed this one very much. What would I do? Hum, I would like to think I would not be greedy...never have been, but never really had that kind of money either....money seems to do strange things to people.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
