Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great chapter, Cindy. I like how it explained several 'things' such as about the witch and the atmosphere of the country during the time this was set and earlier when the witch was alive. I liked the scenes about the water and how all enjoyed it. I feel this is rapidly coming to an end, right? If so, I will miss reading about the dragons. They are a great, fun topic that you have handled well to tell this story. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. There are a couple more chapters. I'm thinking I may do a sequel with Duane and older dragons.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 26-Jan-2020

Great!

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Cindy, I love those wee dragons, and I'm even surprising myself how much I enjoy reading about them. Especially, as I'm not into fantasy writing. Now, I'm looking out for more. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. I'm so glad you're looking for more. I'm trying to keep them as real as possible so they don't come off as ridiculous or cartoonish. It's good to know it's working.

Comment from Diana L Crawford

Exceptional

How sad the witch has departed. I'm sure all will miss her help and guidance. It must seem a little scary for Aaron to have such a big charge to take care without now. I would be.

Look forward to the next chapter as always! xoxo

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. They'll miss her, but she has fulfilled her promise and she shouldn't stay in a world where she doesn't belong. It's time for Aaron and Duane to figure things out on their own. She thinks they're up to it and so do I.

reply by Diana L Crawford on 26-Jan-2020

xoxo!! Aaron definitely has proved himself worthy of this task! :)

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

"especially effected" - "especially affected"

"Morning came, and they awoke to a cold drizzle falling"- delete falling

Sad chapter. The mourning of the dragons as the witch leaves them was indeed heart breaking. It took me by surprise. But she has left them in good hands.

I wonder if she'll join them sometimes in the dream that isn't a dream.

Excellent writing, Cindy. You've kept my interest in the story, and the dragons are wonderful characters.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. And thanks for the catch. I'll fix that right away.

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

Bless their little hearts. They are very sad, but can't cry. The woman meant more to them than I thought. I know there's a time coming when they will all go their separate ways, but I'm not ready for that yet. I'm amazed how these little dragons have crept into my heart as though they were real. That's what good writing does.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. They were sad, but they are dragons and don't hold onto grief like humans do. They've been a lot of fun to create and develop. Maybe when they grow up I'll do a sequel.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

Your chapter is well-written, interesting, believable, but sad. Goodbyes usually are, I'm glad the dragons took the news well, better than expected. Glad Duane found his way in and that he'll be in charge. Nicely done, I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. Duane won't be in charge for a while. Aaron still has a few years left, but of course the dragons will outlive him.

Comment from Cybertron1986

Excellent

Very well written. This chapter displays many fine, appealing qualities. There's a strong sense of character development. I love how the dialogue implies a lot about the nature of the characters and dragons. Also, the chapter has a nice flow to it. It begins gradually, and as the chapter ends there's a cliffhanger that entails a feel of curiosity of what events will transpire next. Overall, an appealing read.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. I hope you will stay tuned for more.

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Great chapter with plenty of dragon interaction!

brave young dragons.
brave young dragons."

specially effected
specially affected

The woman tells Aaron to take the eggs out of the root cellar and hatch them. I don't remember there being eggs in the cellar, but that may be because I've been reading this over weeks instead of hours/days. Even so, I suggest you remind readers about this bit.

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 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks. I'll fix the mistakes right away. She told Aaron she had chicken eggs in the cellar that could hatch. Nothing spoiled in her cellar, but now that she is gone, it will.

reply by Sallyo on 26-Jan-2020

Aha! Thought I was forgettering something. If I'd read this in a few hours/days I'd have "got" that, I think.

reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Going back to work is messing with the time I have for writing, and sometimes I'm just too tired.

reply by Sallyo on 26-Jan-2020

I know the feeling! I love this book.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"The Journey Home,"
A chapter in Arron's Dragons"
Was well. Written rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It also read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

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 Comment Written 26-Jan-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2020

Thanks, Ricky. I'm glad you're still enjoying my book.