Over-sized And Under-loved
5-7-5 - There's someone for every one.21 total reviews
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I like this poem. Fat, skinny or just right, we all have feelings. I am kind of round, myself. When my husband first fell in love with me, I was rounder. I resisted his overtures because I didn't think he was my type, but fat girls (and I think it's okay to say "fat," as long as it's not said in a derogatory manner) can be picky, too. When he eventually won me over, it was also with the knowledge that he loved me just as I was. That's what most of us want: to love and be loved.
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I like this poem. Fat, skinny or just right, we all have feelings. I am kind of round, myself. When my husband first fell in love with me, I was rounder. I resisted his overtures because I didn't think he was my type, but fat girls (and I think it's okay to say "fat," as long as it's not said in a derogatory manner) can be picky, too. When he eventually won me over, it was also with the knowledge that he loved me just as I was. That's what most of us want: to love and be loved.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from Gail Denham
this is sad actually - I was overweight till I drastically dieted as a sophomore - you do feel feckless, unloved, ridiculed. Oh well, I still have extra weight but don't worry about it.
Good poem - describes well how people feel.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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this is sad actually - I was overweight till I drastically dieted as a sophomore - you do feel feckless, unloved, ridiculed. Oh well, I still have extra weight but don't worry about it.
Good poem - describes well how people feel.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much for the terrific rating, Gail. Good on you for the dedication to dieting as a sophomore. I have extra weight myself these days, having been a skinny kid. So many folks 'judge a book by its cover' and have no idea how their comments can wound, or even how the chubby person can wound themselves with low self esteem.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Funny sound-alike going on with the last word especially of 'sighs' and 'size.' I hear 'w' alliteration with 'wobbling' and 'woefully,' short 'a' assonance with 'fat' and 'romantic.' I guess you can say the last line has 's' alliteration with 'seeks' and 'sighs' as emphasized. Fun share today! And especially, as we all get back to the gym for New Year's resolutions coming up, ha.
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Funny sound-alike going on with the last word especially of 'sighs' and 'size.' I hear 'w' alliteration with 'wobbling' and 'woefully,' short 'a' assonance with 'fat' and 'romantic.' I guess you can say the last line has 's' alliteration with 'seeks' and 'sighs' as emphasized. Fun share today! And especially, as we all get back to the gym for New Year's resolutions coming up, ha.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from BeasPeas
Good play on words with sighs/size. From what I have seen and heard, there are plenty of men who prefer saftig women. As my girlfriend's husband says, "there's a lid for every pot." Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
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Good play on words with sighs/size. From what I have seen and heard, there are plenty of men who prefer saftig women. As my girlfriend's husband says, "there's a lid for every pot." Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from Sallyo
Here's hoping she finds a good one! No doubt there's a romantic man out there who would love to be loved... grand alliteration, which does seem a trademark of yours.
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Here's hoping she finds a good one! No doubt there's a romantic man out there who would love to be loved... grand alliteration, which does seem a trademark of yours.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from RodG
I can easily imagine this poem being an ad on an on-line dating service. The advertiser is candid in describing both her physical size and her emotional needs. Good use of alliteration. Rod
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I can easily imagine this poem being an ad on an on-line dating service. The advertiser is candid in describing both her physical size and her emotional needs. Good use of alliteration. Rod
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the bigger girl that usually struggles to get the men interested. Most prefer smaller girls to push around. It seems they are scared the bigger girls will push back.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the bigger girl that usually struggles to get the men interested. Most prefer smaller girls to push around. It seems they are scared the bigger girls will push back.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from May 1
Aww, this is so cute. The poem and the picture match so perfectly and make me smile from ear to ear. It's wonderfully written and has a certain warmth radiating from it. I love it.
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Aww, this is so cute. The poem and the picture match so perfectly and make me smile from ear to ear. It's wonderfully written and has a certain warmth radiating from it. I love it.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
Comment from Ogden
Your 5-7-5 poem is certainly not a haiku, but does qualify as a senyru albeit a pun-ishing one.
(I want to confess that although her type generally is not my preference, I could fall for your wobbly fat girl.)
Don
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Your 5-7-5 poem is certainly not a haiku, but does qualify as a senyru albeit a pun-ishing one.
(I want to confess that although her type generally is not my preference, I could fall for your wobbly fat girl.)
Don
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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It's not trying to be a haiku or a senryu, just fitting the 5-7-5 brief (the fat girl might be having trouble fitting her briefs).
What is it about the fat wobbly one that you think you could fall for? There is little information else about her.
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There's absolutely nothing wrong with being neither a haiku or senyru, Lisa. I'm very open-minded.
Since you ask, I like the way the cutie looks. She appears to be a fun girl, her wobbling notwithstanding, possibly even titillating. Because of your unique relationship, you know her assets best.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This provides a fun read. I like the thought of someone "wobbling woefully with need" {smiles}. By the way, I pronounce "wobbling" as three syllables, but all the online syllable counters count it as having only two syllables. It just shows how my diction is non-standard {frowns to myself}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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This provides a fun read. I like the thought of someone "wobbling woefully with need" {smiles}. By the way, I pronounce "wobbling" as three syllables, but all the online syllable counters count it as having only two syllables. It just shows how my diction is non-standard {frowns to myself}.
Best of luck with the competition judging {smiles}.
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Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Sounds like you pronounce it wobbeling (continuing the sound of 'wobble') instead of wobb-ling
Thanks for reviewing.
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Yep, that's how I pronounce it {frowns}.