The French Letter
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. Some days have so many events that keep the mind busy while the body feels tired and need urgent rest. It happens too many times to count.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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A very well-written chapter. Some days have so many events that keep the mind busy while the body feels tired and need urgent rest. It happens too many times to count.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much for your review, Sandra. Appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from sunnilicious
The start with Chapter 100, I question the first paragraph. The excerpt makes me think of a drug user and alcoholic. Maybe, that's just me. Maybe, it's the words snorted and clean.
Great novel installment. Good mix of narration and dialogue. Good details to keep the story interesting. Nice work
Merry Christmas :)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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The start with Chapter 100, I question the first paragraph. The excerpt makes me think of a drug user and alcoholic. Maybe, that's just me. Maybe, it's the words snorted and clean.
Great novel installment. Good mix of narration and dialogue. Good details to keep the story interesting. Nice work
Merry Christmas :)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Alicia. I hadn't thought of that. Although Kayla is a drug user, I hadn't really intended that in the wording of the sentences you've referred to.
Merry Christmas to you, too.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! He woke up to see that? So they transported him while he was sleeping? Another great post and hope Bisto isn't too taken by Kayla. She sounds even more quixotic than Helen.
Enjoyed the reverie gazing up at Orion.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Oh no! He woke up to see that? So they transported him while he was sleeping? Another great post and hope Bisto isn't too taken by Kayla. She sounds even more quixotic than Helen.
Enjoyed the reverie gazing up at Orion.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Helen. A disturbing nightmare for Charles. Hopefully, not one that presages things to come. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from JudyE
I'm not surprised Charles is having a nightmare or two. The descriptive passages in this are very evocative.
I might have put a comma after 'Together' in the following but I doubt it's necessary: Together we would be invincible.
I have our writing group wind-up this afternoon and it's already nearing 40C at 10.30am. :( Any heatwaves there?
Judy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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I'm not surprised Charles is having a nightmare or two. The descriptive passages in this are very evocative.
I might have put a comma after 'Together' in the following but I doubt it's necessary: Together we would be invincible.
I have our writing group wind-up this afternoon and it's already nearing 40C at 10.30am. :( Any heatwaves there?
Judy
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks for the review and sixth star, Judy. Appreciated, as always. We've been busy in the garden this week, checking all the drippers and mulching the garden with pea straw. Hopefully, we'll save some of it. Battening down the hatches for the approaching heatwave.
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The last two nights, just before dusk, we've had the water-carrying helicopters fly directly over our place on their way home from fighting fires near Collie. We're looking forward to slightly lower temperatures now we've sent the hot weather your way.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think Charles' time in prison has affected him both mentally and physically. He can't eat or sleep. I wonder how he's going to manage to do much of anything. I hope he finds Helen. Hopefully she can make him take it easy.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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I think Charles' time in prison has affected him both mentally and physically. He can't eat or sleep. I wonder how he's going to manage to do much of anything. I hope he finds Helen. Hopefully she can make him take it easy.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Cindy. He's in a bad way. Maybe finding Helen will help restore him. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from juliaSjames
"Never turn up the chance of a good meal..." - did you mean "Never turn up my nose at the chance..."
"Enough to enable Alain to look after his sister for the term of her natural life" - possibly "More than enough..."
Now that's out of the way, I can concentrate on your story. I enjoyed the interaction between Charles and Bisto in this chapter. They chatted as only old friends can. And the back story that was revealed was most helpful to readers like me.
Not surprised that Bisto is taken with Kayla. But we'll have to see if she's responsive.
But now the really dangerous part of the story is looming on the horizon. Little wonder that Charles is having premonitions. The dream sequence was written with exquisite care, Tony. Kudos.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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"Never turn up the chance of a good meal..." - did you mean "Never turn up my nose at the chance..."
"Enough to enable Alain to look after his sister for the term of her natural life" - possibly "More than enough..."
Now that's out of the way, I can concentrate on your story. I enjoyed the interaction between Charles and Bisto in this chapter. They chatted as only old friends can. And the back story that was revealed was most helpful to readers like me.
Not surprised that Bisto is taken with Kayla. But we'll have to see if she's responsive.
But now the really dangerous part of the story is looming on the horizon. Little wonder that Charles is having premonitions. The dream sequence was written with exquisite care, Tony. Kudos.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, Julia. 'Turn down' would probably have been a better word choice. Anyway, I've changed it now to "Never miss the chance of a good meal"
I had "More than enough" and then changed it to avoid having "more' twice in quick succession. You're right, though. It should be "More than enough" I've changed the other one instead.
As always, I appreciate your suggestions.
Glad you enjoyed the dream sequence!
All good wishes, Tony
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You're welcome Tony. It's a great book.
Julia
Comment from Pam Norris
I am getting hooked on your story. I find myself becoming more and more invested in the characters, well done. You manage to leave something hanging in the air at the end of each chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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I am getting hooked on your story. I find myself becoming more and more invested in the characters, well done. You manage to leave something hanging in the air at the end of each chapter.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, so much for these comments, Pam. I'm delighted to hear that you are enjoying the story and the characterisation. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with this chapter, Tony. While some things seem to fall into place, others seem to open up more intrigue--Kayla, Bisto, the sale of the painting . . . There seem to be many ulterior motives with most of the characters. Thank for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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You did a good job with this chapter, Tony. While some things seem to fall into place, others seem to open up more intrigue--Kayla, Bisto, the sale of the painting . . . There seem to be many ulterior motives with most of the characters. Thank for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Jan. You're right. Few things are quite as they seem! As always, I appreciate your review and interest. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
As usual, a nice chapter as a recap of the encounter with Helen sprinkle with some stolen art and the eternal question mark - is there some love floating in the air. The final is poetic and funny in the same time :"ter a while, my eyes grew heavy and the carpet rose gently into the air. It transported me through the casement window to the faerie slopes of Tirich Mir beyond. I saw a small herd of markhors grazing on the silver mountainside, unaware of a single snow leopard stalking them.
In vain, I called out, but my voice was swallowed by the night. I called again but was powerless to stop the killing. Fangs sank into soft flesh, and I woke with a scream to see blood on the crest of the mountain and a sky transforming from obsidian darkness to the dawn hues of sapphire and jade"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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As usual, a nice chapter as a recap of the encounter with Helen sprinkle with some stolen art and the eternal question mark - is there some love floating in the air. The final is poetic and funny in the same time :"ter a while, my eyes grew heavy and the carpet rose gently into the air. It transported me through the casement window to the faerie slopes of Tirich Mir beyond. I saw a small herd of markhors grazing on the silver mountainside, unaware of a single snow leopard stalking them.
In vain, I called out, but my voice was swallowed by the night. I called again but was powerless to stop the killing. Fangs sank into soft flesh, and I woke with a scream to see blood on the crest of the mountain and a sky transforming from obsidian darkness to the dawn hues of sapphire and jade"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks very much for your review and comments, Iza. Appreciated, as always. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from w.j.debi
I especially like your descriptions in this chapter. That dream sequence is creepy and foreboding.
It is also interesting how people display characteristics they keep hidden most of the time when they are under the influence of a few drinks.
Orion is one of my favorite constellations. Maybe because it's one of the few I can see any more with all the light pollution we have with the city growing around us. I liked how you named the stars within and around it.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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I especially like your descriptions in this chapter. That dream sequence is creepy and foreboding.
It is also interesting how people display characteristics they keep hidden most of the time when they are under the influence of a few drinks.
Orion is one of my favorite constellations. Maybe because it's one of the few I can see any more with all the light pollution we have with the city growing around us. I liked how you named the stars within and around it.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2019
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Thanks, WJ. I've been chastised by Jim for pinching his Orion! LOL. You're right though. It is one of the most familiar of the constellations and easy to recognise.
Delighted that you thought this chapter worth a sixth star. Most affirming.
All good wishes, Tony