Redeeming One's Identity
Book Intro - A teen's perspective on divorce and desertion16 total reviews
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is really a sad story. It's well written. I was hoping that you would
live happily ever after. But you didn't marry the right man. Life has been
tough on you.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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This is really a sad story. It's well written. I was hoping that you would
live happily ever after. But you didn't marry the right man. Life has been
tough on you.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2019
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Yes but I did meet a wonderful man, after never thinking I would marry again, and my life is wonderful now.
Thanks for your excellent review. Kind regards.
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So happy to hear that.
Comment from papa55mike
People sometimes never see the despair they leave behind after critical decisions. I'm glad your pain is easing. This story is wonderfully written, and I love the picture. Some things to help" In paragraph 5 try "Why? Why?" I kept asking myself. Add paragraph breaks at 8, 9, and 10. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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People sometimes never see the despair they leave behind after critical decisions. I'm glad your pain is easing. This story is wonderfully written, and I love the picture. Some things to help" In paragraph 5 try "Why? Why?" I kept asking myself. Add paragraph breaks at 8, 9, and 10. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much for your review and suggestions. I so greatly appreciate it.
God bless you too!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting story for the Share Your Story contest.
Your story about being left by two men in your life is a heartbreaker.
I found 1 typo: "often took me to their home On weekends" - on weekends.
Also, if you named your brother it would be easier to follow. Twice you refer to him as your brother who is 18 months younger than you.
Otherwise, very nicely done.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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I think this is an interesting story for the Share Your Story contest.
Your story about being left by two men in your life is a heartbreaker.
I found 1 typo: "often took me to their home On weekends" - on weekends.
Also, if you named your brother it would be easier to follow. Twice you refer to him as your brother who is 18 months younger than you.
Otherwise, very nicely done.
Sharon
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2019
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Thank you. I will correct.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Powerful writing that is very well expressed! I will give you six stars if I had it. It takes a lot of guts to write from your heart and lay it on the table like you did. You did an amazing job! I'm glad you had a supportive family in other ways and have benefited from a good counselor. Keep writing!
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Powerful writing that is very well expressed! I will give you six stars if I had it. It takes a lot of guts to write from your heart and lay it on the table like you did. You did an amazing job! I'm glad you had a supportive family in other ways and have benefited from a good counselor. Keep writing!
Bill
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks Bill. This was a tough one to write. I appreciate your review.
Thanks for your support as well. My life is very good now but while writing feelings of disbelief returned...how did I actually get through this. Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from patcelaw
To be deserted at such a young age can leave some deep scars on a life. It is sometimes hard to write about the difficult things, but writing helps one to heal. May your day be blessed and your weekend good.
Patricia
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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To be deserted at such a young age can leave some deep scars on a life. It is sometimes hard to write about the difficult things, but writing helps one to heal. May your day be blessed and your weekend good.
Patricia
Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks very much for your review. I hesitated about writing this but then decided to proceed. I thought all was forgotten but while writing raw feelings returned. I'm so happy that my life is very good now. Have a wonderful weekend.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from oliver818
What a heart-wrenching tale. Life can be so cruel sometimes. You did a great job of expressing yourself and your experience here. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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What a heart-wrenching tale. Life can be so cruel sometimes. You did a great job of expressing yourself and your experience here. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2019
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Thanks for the kind review and kind thoughts. It was tough to write but am glad that I did write it. My life is very good now but while writing many memories returned.
Have a wonderful weekend.