Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Okay, so first off - that's a really cool pic!! But then....wow, what a creepy thing to move with your family and then die being nailed to a tree -- definitely a Halloween-ish offering, Doc! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks Yvette.
Ricky

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Poor John. Time and the world have a way of messing things up. The past doesn't always stay past and sometimes catches up with you in unexpected ways. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks Cindy.
Ricky

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is a very creepy ending, Ricky, exactly what the contest requires. I liked the style too, it was like a horror form of poetry, that gripped you from the first line. I would love a sequel after the contest is over. Good luck! )) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Yes,
That will come.
His son will mature and revenge?
A Sweet thing!
Thanks,
Ricky

Comment from Nowhereman1

Excellent

this is a Very well written story. The structure flowed nicely and it was easy to read and follow along. The characters were relatable and interesting. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks do much Nowhereman.
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a well penned piece that speaks to the topic of horror well. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks and good luck too!
Ricky

Comment from robyn corum

Good

Ricky,

This is definitely intriguing - but you don't tell us the whole story. What happened? What were the secrets in her past? And how did they end up hurting him?

Also - you have capitalized some words in the middle of sentences. In the beginning you said 2029, when I think you meant 2019.

Thanks and good luck!

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 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

I fixed the year as for the outcome?
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I did like this piece although it read more like a poem than a story. I thought the first part was really good then, for me, the story fell apart a little. It was really well written, though, hence the five. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks dear.
Ricky

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

An interesting entry for this contest. What a way to die, tied to a tree and bled dry. Should make an interesting entry into this contest. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

The Bled dry thing?
Rhymed well!
And thanks Brett!
Ricky

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

Hi Ricky1024,
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:

Nail to a DoubleTree and left to Die and Bleed... -- I didn't know what a "doubletree" was. Thank you for broadening my horizons {smiles}. As an aside, do you mean "Nailed to a doubletree" instead of "Nail to a doubletress"?

And, time was ungrateful as could ever be? -- I like this snippet. The concept that [the passage of] time is ungrateful is a neat one {thumbs up}.

Wishing you the best of luck with the contest judging committee {smiles}.

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 Comment Written 22-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019

Thanks Alex.
The double thing with the tree was actually an error.
I didn't bother to erace the double.
I just left it in there.
My thought was to connect two trees as if to the base.
....
I used to own a house and there were a lot of Pine and Pin-Oak.
The Oak trees...
(Eight)
Were connected at a base.
And, it took 30 years for them to get to the Height they attained.
Memories...
I'll tell you....
"The Twin Blue Spruce Topper"
Story one day.
It involves my passed Don Jason.
It's beautiful.
Watch for it.
Maybe even today and thanks.
Ricky

reply by Alex Rosel on 22-Oct-2019

Thumbs up.