Comment from royowen

Excellent

I really love stories about knights and dragons, in this case many dragons. The descriptive nature of this episode is a very well thought out and your imagination is very sound, the fact that you have concocted a genuine plan for your characters, is quite impressive, well done, good episode, blessings, Roy
Typo : Perfectly good hunter(')s cabin

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019

Thanks for catching that. I'll fix it right now.

reply by royowen on 21-Oct-2019

Well done Cindy

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

hunters cabin."
hunters' cabin."
The quiet before a storm, I suspect. I liked Aaron's "hiding in plain sight" tactic with his old friend, and the twins are a new interest. I'm feeling sorry for poor Black, and hope he's a reformed character.
As usual, not much more to say except... getonwithit!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019

Thanks for catching that. It's fixed. I can't reform Black too much; can't let him and red get dull! He won't be trying to eat any more horses, tho. He does learn.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

I counted 12 times the name Aaron was used in the beginning of your story before I stopped. Perhaps you might consider replacing some mentions of this character with a pronoun.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019

Thanks. I may need to take another look at that.

Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

I haven't read the previous chapters of this, so I come to it cold.

Here are a few points you might like to consider:

Same as you, I recon. -- Spag? Do you mean "Same as you, I reckon."

But I want you to know, I know the tax collectors are taking more than folks can spare. I know those folks are hiding a chicken coop or two in the forest.-- There's a lot of "knowing" going on here. If this was mine, I'd reword it to something like ""But I want you to know, the tax collectors are taking more than folks can spare. Folks are hiding a chicken coop or two in the forest."

The little dragon stretched out along his forearm, and though his tail dangled a bit, he was about the same length. -- Nice imagery {smiles}.

By noon, the dragoyles, -- I like the name, dragoyles {smiles}.

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 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019

Thanks for the suggestions. I'll take another look at that. I'll fix 'reckon' right away.

Comment from beizanten

Excellent

A very interesting past chapters summary. Intriguing opening paragraph. Interesting characters and I like how you potray their action and emotion well. please keep up the great work

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 Comment Written 21-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2019

Thanks. I think the two new 'dragoyles' should be a lot of fun.