Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Trouble Starts"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
19 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
The story is developing nicely, Cindy. Aaron is committed to the dragons now. As more leave their eggs and as they grow, his problems will increase.
You have established a framework for rebellion against the king. I'm eager to see how the plot will unfold. And what mischief Red will get up to.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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The story is developing nicely, Cindy. Aaron is committed to the dragons now. As more leave their eggs and as they grow, his problems will increase.
You have established a framework for rebellion against the king. I'm eager to see how the plot will unfold. And what mischief Red will get up to.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Yes, Aaron's life is about to get interesting.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a good continuation of your story, Cindy. I enjoyed reading it. The intensity of the suspense of what's next is building fast. I like the water dragon and the one that sits in Aaron's lap. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan,
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a good continuation of your story, Cindy. I enjoyed reading it. The intensity of the suspense of what's next is building fast. I like the water dragon and the one that sits in Aaron's lap. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan,
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. Yes, life is about to get very interesting for Aaron.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
There is still the joy of the dragons hatching and continuing to grow, but this story is revealing a deeper, dark side that I wasn't expecting at the beginning. I think this weekend I will have to go back and read the whole thing in one sitting, to try and work out when that all seeped in.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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There is still the joy of the dragons hatching and continuing to grow, but this story is revealing a deeper, dark side that I wasn't expecting at the beginning. I think this weekend I will have to go back and read the whole thing in one sitting, to try and work out when that all seeped in.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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There's more eggs to hatch. I was afraid this didn't have a story and was just becoming an inventory of dragons, so I've been working on the plot a little more.
Comment from Sallyo
Excellent, as usual. Things are tightening up for Aaron and the witch is right... he needs to concentrate on what he CAN do. He's an interesting hero, as he's not out to save the world, but just this nest of eggs.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Excellent, as usual. Things are tightening up for Aaron and the witch is right... he needs to concentrate on what he CAN do. He's an interesting hero, as he's not out to save the world, but just this nest of eggs.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Typo below.
, bit it would work
, but it would work
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. I'll get in that typo right away.
Comment from Mistydawn
The dragons are growing up, learning to do things for themselves. I have a feeling Aaron will be heartbroken when they have to go. Glad the red dragon has finally settled down the mischievious thing. The chapter is well-written interesting, believable. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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The dragons are growing up, learning to do things for themselves. I have a feeling Aaron will be heartbroken when they have to go. Glad the red dragon has finally settled down the mischievious thing. The chapter is well-written interesting, believable. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. I think there's plenty of trouble in the red dragon. I had to figure out how to get her out of that jug. She couldn't do too much in there.
Comment from tfawcus
You, as the author, fade into the background. There is nothing here to distract the reader from the story. That is just as it should be.
Just one small grammatical point:
None were (was) ready to hatch.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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You, as the author, fade into the background. There is nothing here to distract the reader from the story. That is just as it should be.
Just one small grammatical point:
None were (was) ready to hatch.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. I'll get on that spag right away.
Comment from damommy
This is a most delightful story. I'm so glad he let the little dragon sleep with him. He's safer sleeping out there with Demon who can alert him if anyone comes.
I have no idea where this story is headed, but I'm along for the ride.
-The impact [of] what he'd just said hit him.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a most delightful story. I'm so glad he let the little dragon sleep with him. He's safer sleeping out there with Demon who can alert him if anyone comes.
I have no idea where this story is headed, but I'm along for the ride.
-The impact [of] what he'd just said hit him.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. And thanks for catching the spag. I'll fix it right now.
Comment from country ranch writer
This is a great story of the dragons and their friend there with them to look out for them and trying to keep his horse from being eaten by the king.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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This is a great story of the dragons and their friend there with them to look out for them and trying to keep his horse from being eaten by the king.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks for the six! I hope you will stick around and enjoy the rest of the story.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another beautiful story with my favourite dragons blue the sleep talker and pink the wise. I cannot wait for the next chapter. Your narrative is such an easy readð?¥°
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Another beautiful story with my favourite dragons blue the sleep talker and pink the wise. I cannot wait for the next chapter. Your narrative is such an easy readð?¥°
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks. The plan is to keep it suitable for younger readers. They do not look up words or struggle with difficult prose.