Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Aaron"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is well penned and a thoroughly engaging read. You use imagery to your advantage allowing you to paint a vivid picture in a few well chosen words. I love the little red dragon :) quite the feisty and intriguing little character. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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This is well penned and a thoroughly engaging read. You use imagery to your advantage allowing you to paint a vivid picture in a few well chosen words. I love the little red dragon :) quite the feisty and intriguing little character. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks. I thought I knew what to do with that little red monster, but it turns out she has more fans than I do. LOL
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LOL! She deserves them :) she is a feisty little doll.
Comment from Mistydawn
The red dragon is quite a handful. A dragon with a bad attitude, wonderful. It would've been nice if they were all as pleasant as the water dragon and the last one. The chapter is well-written, interesting moves your story along nicely, great job.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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The red dragon is quite a handful. A dragon with a bad attitude, wonderful. It would've been nice if they were all as pleasant as the water dragon and the last one. The chapter is well-written, interesting moves your story along nicely, great job.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks. Some of the dragons have to be feisty, or it would be a dull story! I want the reader to wonder what will hatch next. People would get bored if they were all sweet and friendly.
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True. Where's the challenge in docile dragons? In my years of caring for furry babies it seems the ornery ones are the ones I remember most. Squeaky wheel theory.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
At least some dragons, like the red one, are dangerous, so it's no surprise the kingdom doesn't want them around. Why would Aaron break the law and risk trouble to save the little monster? He should report finding them. He doesn't need any trouble at his age. :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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At least some dragons, like the red one, are dangerous, so it's no surprise the kingdom doesn't want them around. Why would Aaron break the law and risk trouble to save the little monster? He should report finding them. He doesn't need any trouble at his age. :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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If Aaron did that, what happens to my story? I can't imagine my readers want recipes for dragon a la king. LOL Aaron needs to be a bit of a rebel, or all I'd have is a cookbook!
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LOL! You have a point. I just hope Aaron doesn't end up rotting in prison! :)
Comment from Sallyo
A few typos below... but on the whole this is cracking along marvellously well. Aaron is an attractive character; patient and kind, but also pragmatic. Really looking forward to seeing the pink egg hatch.
He streached his
He stretched his
little guys, he told the eggs, but if it's
little guys," he told the eggs, "but if it's
Then he returned to staring at the green egg. The crack was a little larger. He went back to staring at it.
This is told twice...
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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A few typos below... but on the whole this is cracking along marvellously well. Aaron is an attractive character; patient and kind, but also pragmatic. Really looking forward to seeing the pink egg hatch.
He streached his
He stretched his
little guys, he told the eggs, but if it's
little guys," he told the eggs, "but if it's
Then he returned to staring at the green egg. The crack was a little larger. He went back to staring at it.
This is told twice...
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks for catching those. I'll get it fixed right away. Was pretty tired when I posted this last night.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
manoeuvred (maneuvered)
Wow, A grumpy hungry dragon sounds quite difficult to deal with. Well written chapter, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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manoeuvred (maneuvered)
Wow, A grumpy hungry dragon sounds quite difficult to deal with. Well written chapter, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks. Yep, some are a handful, but he's attached to them, even the little feisty one.
Comment from royowen
I've always liked science fantasy since I was young, and have read the popular ones like stories of Merlin, ranging from very happy ones and then this one, with a hero named Aaron, who seems to be baby dragon sitting, I enjoyed this imaginative story, living in two realities, things look very interesting for Aaron and his bevy of dragons, well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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I've always liked science fantasy since I was young, and have read the popular ones like stories of Merlin, ranging from very happy ones and then this one, with a hero named Aaron, who seems to be baby dragon sitting, I enjoyed this imaginative story, living in two realities, things look very interesting for Aaron and his bevy of dragons, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks. Yep, Aaron is going to have his hands full.
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Well done
Comment from Dihalia
I liked your story. Its original. I liked your description of how a dragon hatch. Your story is entertaining. Its easy to follow, not reasearched words.
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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I liked your story. Its original. I liked your description of how a dragon hatch. Your story is entertaining. Its easy to follow, not reasearched words.
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thanks. I wanted to keep it simple enough for a young teen to read. They won't research words. Glad you enjoyed.
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Your welcome.