The Street-smart Bird
double nonet16 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Clever double nonet contribution. I find it gives you much more freedom with the ending, so this is stronger than in a classical nonet. However, in the middle of this half it seems to grow a little muddled, and the bird is a bit bitter. That is a pity, I find.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Clever double nonet contribution. I find it gives you much more freedom with the ending, so this is stronger than in a classical nonet. However, in the middle of this half it seems to grow a little muddled, and the bird is a bit bitter. That is a pity, I find.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from papa55mike
The picture of what I think is a bee-eater is amazing. I love this well-written poem, and yes, we all love the flashy.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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The picture of what I think is a bee-eater is amazing. I love this well-written poem, and yes, we all love the flashy.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading your unique approach to the Nonet contest. Your double Nonet was well done and highlighted the two approaches and points of view of the characters. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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I enjoyed reading your unique approach to the Nonet contest. Your double Nonet was well done and highlighted the two approaches and points of view of the characters. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets and exceeds the contest requirements as you deliver not one, but two well constructed Nonets. The content is beautifully executed as you express the innocence of youthful innocence versus the reality of a grown-up perspective of the world. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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This meets and exceeds the contest requirements as you deliver not one, but two well constructed Nonets. The content is beautifully executed as you express the innocence of youthful innocence versus the reality of a grown-up perspective of the world. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image, Alicia.
-I think this is a
Lilac Roller Bird.
-The syllable count and
shape are very good.
-The imagery is effective, too:
"Boring blabbermouth birds"
-I like how you take on the
persona of the bird in the beginning.
-You also present some intersting
thoughts as it ponders its surroundings.
-I like the ending, too.
-Very well done; thanks for sharing.
-One very minor thing- I think you
meant used in line two.
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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-Great image, Alicia.
-I think this is a
Lilac Roller Bird.
-The syllable count and
shape are very good.
-The imagery is effective, too:
"Boring blabbermouth birds"
-I like how you take on the
persona of the bird in the beginning.
-You also present some intersting
thoughts as it ponders its surroundings.
-I like the ending, too.
-Very well done; thanks for sharing.
-One very minor thing- I think you
meant used in line two.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2019
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Thank you :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a very clever and well-written poem which fits the format as described in the guidelines. The picture you chose emphasizes the words. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This is a very clever and well-written poem which fits the format as described in the guidelines. The picture you chose emphasizes the words. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Hi Susan! You're nice. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)