The old guitarist
Description of the Picasso painting52 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
No wonder you're a winner! This is a great rhyming poem that puts my writing to shame. Have you been to Barcelona? I ask because my best man (now deceased) was a big Dr. Who fan, and there was an episode where the Doctor and an alien went restaurant-hopping in Barcelona, and I always think of that when I hear that name. Anyhow, this was perfect. No faults to report, and keep on writing!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
No wonder you're a winner! This is a great rhyming poem that puts my writing to shame. Have you been to Barcelona? I ask because my best man (now deceased) was a big Dr. Who fan, and there was an episode where the Doctor and an alien went restaurant-hopping in Barcelona, and I always think of that when I hear that name. Anyhow, this was perfect. No faults to report, and keep on writing!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
-
Thanks Jim for the great review. I have been to Barcelona many times. It is my favorite city. Take care. Jen.
-
Wish I could have visited that city! Now, in a wheelchair, i can barely visit nearby cities.
-
Ah bless you x
-
I have been blessed by your writing!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I don't know how I could have missed this fine poem, but I'm sure glad you posted it again. Mostly a prose reader and writer who doesn't know the first thing about poetry, which you know, I seldom give up one of our few sixes for a poem. But anything less for your outstanding contest winner would be criminal. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
Wow, I don't know how I could have missed this fine poem, but I'm sure glad you posted it again. Mostly a prose reader and writer who doesn't know the first thing about poetry, which you know, I seldom give up one of our few sixes for a poem. But anything less for your outstanding contest winner would be criminal. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
-
Thank you so much my friend for the great review and stars. So glad you like it. Love Jen. X
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well rhyme form that you have presented, and I can see why it was the rhyming poetry contest winner. Congratulations on that win. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
This is a very well rhyme form that you have presented, and I can see why it was the rhyming poetry contest winner. Congratulations on that win. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
-
Thank you so much Patricia
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a truly wonderful piece of well written poetry. The rhythm and rhyme scheme is good and the imagery is vividly descriptive. Good use of alliteration too. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
Wow what a truly wonderful piece of well written poetry. The rhythm and rhyme scheme is good and the imagery is vividly descriptive. Good use of alliteration too. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
-
Thank you so much. Take care. Jen
Comment from JSD
Lovely poem, Jen. Your rhyme, rhythm and structure work so well together to tell a most affecting story. The character is so moving. A lovely revival of a post. x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
Lovely poem, Jen. Your rhyme, rhythm and structure work so well together to tell a most affecting story. The character is so moving. A lovely revival of a post. x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
-
Thanks John. I am so glad you like it. Cheers Jen.
Comment from Bar62
Bravo', nicely done! I like the way you used the economy of words, by this I mean you used just the right words to convey your message/your story. Not too long, everything fit together without any words that sounded awkward or like the word was looking for its home but being unsuccessful
Shalom,
Bar Ponneck
A couple of my favorite stanza's
His fingers are raw
from the steel strings he uses.
Thin legs covered
in sores and bruises
Folks sneer as they pass
unaffected is he
as he hears and he feels
but his eyes cannot see
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
Bravo', nicely done! I like the way you used the economy of words, by this I mean you used just the right words to convey your message/your story. Not too long, everything fit together without any words that sounded awkward or like the word was looking for its home but being unsuccessful
Shalom,
Bar Ponneck
A couple of my favorite stanza's
His fingers are raw
from the steel strings he uses.
Thin legs covered
in sores and bruises
Folks sneer as they pass
unaffected is he
as he hears and he feels
but his eyes cannot see
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
-
Thank you. Shalom. Jen.
Comment from Rod A. White
Congrats on the win! Nice rhyming poem that both tells a compelling story and evokes emotion for the poor, old, blind singer who shares his gift, not for attention, but from the heart. =)
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
Congrats on the win! Nice rhyming poem that both tells a compelling story and evokes emotion for the poor, old, blind singer who shares his gift, not for attention, but from the heart. =)
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
-
Thank you so much Rod. Take cafe. Jen
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
-
Thank you so much. This means so much to me. I am absolutely buzzing. Jen
Comment from kahpot
What a beautiful and sad story in this poem, I can see the people passing with their sneers towards him, an excellent read and descriptive poem with wonderful artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
What a beautiful and sad story in this poem, I can see the people passing with their sneers towards him, an excellent read and descriptive poem with wonderful artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
-
Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed it. Cheers Jen
Comment from Aussie
****** six virtual stars my friend. Beautifully written from the heart. We call folks like him, buskers. Some walk past throwing coins into the case. I wonder if he makes enough to feed himself. Some are talented musicians, I do feel for them but they wouldn't have it any other way.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
****** six virtual stars my friend. Beautifully written from the heart. We call folks like him, buskers. Some walk past throwing coins into the case. I wonder if he makes enough to feed himself. Some are talented musicians, I do feel for them but they wouldn't have it any other way.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
-
Thank you, my friend. Jen.