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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Nice episode. Going to church with his parents surely told Nancy they are indeed a couple, and she seems to approve. I can't wait to see what they find at the dump site. I hope it's important.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Nice episode. Going to church with his parents surely told Nancy they are indeed a couple, and she seems to approve. I can't wait to see what they find at the dump site. I hope it's important.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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We'll have to wait and see. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I am still bopping to the video. Poor Barb with all those little brats. LOL. Still hanging in here with you on the story. It does keep me betting on which way this is going.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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I am still bopping to the video. Poor Barb with all those little brats. LOL. Still hanging in here with you on the story. It does keep me betting on which way this is going.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Ben. I appreciate all your support.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was a great continuation to the story and you made the story flow along in a natural and laid back manner. I liked that and I do like the story. I'm on a big journey at the moment, but do hope to post Sunday coming. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Hi Barbara, this was a great continuation to the story and you made the story flow along in a natural and laid back manner. I liked that and I do like the story. I'm on a big journey at the moment, but do hope to post Sunday coming. Ulla xx
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Please have a great time. I appreciate you talking time to read.
Comment from royowen
So, it's a real place, and a real band, as I see from your video clip, I think Mackenzie is almost getting used to the even tempered Logan, going to church seems to be a normal part of Logan's and his parent's lives, but prickly Mack, not so much. I really enjoyed this Barbara, Logan is very attracted to Logan well dine, an excellent episode, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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So, it's a real place, and a real band, as I see from your video clip, I think Mackenzie is almost getting used to the even tempered Logan, going to church seems to be a normal part of Logan's and his parent's lives, but prickly Mack, not so much. I really enjoyed this Barbara, Logan is very attracted to Logan well dine, an excellent episode, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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My privilege Barbara
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter and thankful the SIXES are back. Getting ever so closer to my departure from here. Now as to spags, or not?? Suit yourself ok!. "Why (are??)you decked out in a suit?"
"I used to go every Sunday to (a) small church,
What time [are](is) our dinner plan(ned)[s]?"
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Good chapter and thankful the SIXES are back. Getting ever so closer to my departure from here. Now as to spags, or not?? Suit yourself ok!. "Why (are??)you decked out in a suit?"
"I used to go every Sunday to (a) small church,
What time [are](is) our dinner plan(ned)[s]?"
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the help. I appreciate it. I made a mistake and deleted your six instead of hitting send. I am sorry. I appreciate the six stars and your generous support. HUGS!!
Comment from Sylvia Page
I enjoyed reading this chapter as it was written in a very casual kind of way. The dialogue was great. Imagery surfaced perfectly, felt like I was there.
just one little omission here...
"I used to go every Sunday to small church, just down the block.
Have a nice day
Sylvia
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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I enjoyed reading this chapter as it was written in a very casual kind of way. The dialogue was great. Imagery surfaced perfectly, felt like I was there.
just one little omission here...
"I used to go every Sunday to small church, just down the block.
Have a nice day
Sylvia
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the catch. I will add that little word.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You did a great job in writing this story....(when writing for contests, the errors cannot happen. I know it's not easy to catch them; I thank the authors that do though) This is a mystery story...do they catch the person in the next chapter, the one whodunit?
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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You did a great job in writing this story....(when writing for contests, the errors cannot happen. I know it's not easy to catch them; I thank the authors that do though) This is a mystery story...do they catch the person in the next chapter, the one whodunit?
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Nope, they don't catch the person in the next chapter. It will be a while, but they do catch them. This is not a contest entry.
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okay, what do you click if you don't want it in the contest?
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That I have no idea. I don't enter any contest.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In the beginning there is catch, theme is enormous, this chapter plot goes naturally and harmoniously, a few characters are realistic and contributory like some little dialogues; formal and curious ending; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; liked your excellent work; enjoyed the read; write to inspire readers to change.
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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In the beginning there is catch, theme is enormous, this chapter plot goes naturally and harmoniously, a few characters are realistic and contributory like some little dialogues; formal and curious ending; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; liked your excellent work; enjoyed the read; write to inspire readers to change.
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
