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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred and fifty-word flash fiction. Unfortunately, when there is one person in control of land, the ones who feed the king has not any say and their complaints are just ignored and thrown in the river to flow down to the ocean,
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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A very well-written hundred and fifty-word flash fiction. Unfortunately, when there is one person in control of land, the ones who feed the king has not any say and their complaints are just ignored and thrown in the river to flow down to the ocean,
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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How true, Sandra. How true. Thanks for the kind words and astute observation. Craig
Comment from Alex Rosel
The is an entertaining piece of nonsense flash fiction. I hope it does well for you in the contest {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
to provide entertainment and stimulation. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the "and stimulation". Of course, that will throw your word count, though.
whereupon contests ceased being judged on merit. -- I like this concept. It will likely have readers intrigued and wanting to read on {smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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The is an entertaining piece of nonsense flash fiction. I hope it does well for you in the contest {smiles}.
Here are a couple of points you might like to consider:
to provide entertainment and stimulation. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the "and stimulation". Of course, that will throw your word count, though.
whereupon contests ceased being judged on merit. -- I like this concept. It will likely have readers intrigued and wanting to read on {smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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I'm not all that happy with "stimulation" myself. I'll see if I can come up with something better. Thanks for the helpful suggestion. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This story tells about a man who was so tricky, funny and undisputed seer of his family and he made new rules and games but managed complaints and dissatisfied members and ruled his family happily; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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This story tells about a man who was so tricky, funny and undisputed seer of his family and he made new rules and games but managed complaints and dissatisfied members and ruled his family happily; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the kind comments. Most appreciated, Craig
Comment from lyenochka
Hmm. Is this a parable? It sounds like it could be about an online writing website where writers appear and disappear inexplicably. But perhaps I'm reading too much. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Hmm. Is this a parable? It sounds like it could be about an online writing website where writers appear and disappear inexplicably. But perhaps I'm reading too much. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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The best parables have a smidgeon of truth to them, Helen. Thanks for the kind words, I'll leave the forwarding address for the prize money with you, if that's ok ;-)
Cheers,
Craig
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Are you planning on disappearing?
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Not necessarily. I've backed up all my work (that took quite some time), in case that eventuates. I've also taken all my work offline. Unfortunately, having works on display here inhibits the chance of them being published elsewhere. I'm just sorting out which way to go at the moment.
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Would be sad to see you go. But keep in touch if you do. I always start my work in Google docs and then copy here but I don't always go back and edit in Google docs. I seem to always be in sandbox mode.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Well,it seems not everyone had a happy ending in this one. But, yes, the main character does. Best wishes in the contest, my fiend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Well,it seems not everyone had a happy ending in this one. But, yes, the main character does. Best wishes in the contest, my fiend~Debbie
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Fiend? lol You wouldn't be the first to suggest that, Debbie ;-) Many thanks, Craig
Comment from closetpoetjester
Gosh but this does sound a little familiar Craig haha
You forgot to mention how some of the clan love to scratch the eyeballs out of others in verbal stouches of unwavering faith in their ideals, not to mention scathing attacks on genuine skill of particular clan members, be it making people laugh or simply sculpting words into beautifully structured and perfect sounding rythmic patterns and the like.
Ah yes...please DON'T get disqualified from this one. Speak the truth. For the truth shall have you impri...oops I mean thrown ou...ooops I mean it shall set you freeeeeeeeeeeeeeee~!
Great post and bit of flashy fiction.
If your post was say, an apple and this place was a tree...well...
just sayin'.
A six worthy scar...oops I mean fairy tale.
Pxx
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Gosh but this does sound a little familiar Craig haha
You forgot to mention how some of the clan love to scratch the eyeballs out of others in verbal stouches of unwavering faith in their ideals, not to mention scathing attacks on genuine skill of particular clan members, be it making people laugh or simply sculpting words into beautifully structured and perfect sounding rythmic patterns and the like.
Ah yes...please DON'T get disqualified from this one. Speak the truth. For the truth shall have you impri...oops I mean thrown ou...ooops I mean it shall set you freeeeeeeeeeeeeeee~!
Great post and bit of flashy fiction.
If your post was say, an apple and this place was a tree...well...
just sayin'.
A six worthy scar...oops I mean fairy tale.
Pxx
Comment Written 22-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2019
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Haha... well it's worth every bit of being cast into outer darkness just to receive that review, Phillippa. Thanks so much :) Craig
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No probs fellow clanstorian lol