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Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "St. Louis Chapter 11 part 1"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from royowen
Caught holding hands, if that's not a couple I don't know what is. Mack and Logan go to have a look at Megan's flat for clues and in the process Mack meets Logan's parents, they are offered tea, and discover that the key has been displaced. The report said that the police didn't look at the flat, well done, great episode, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Caught holding hands, if that's not a couple I don't know what is. Mack and Logan go to have a look at Megan's flat for clues and in the process Mack meets Logan's parents, they are offered tea, and discover that the key has been displaced. The report said that the police didn't look at the flat, well done, great episode, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from tfawcus
The family scene is realistically portrayed. The sequence of the lost keys was natural but also injected a little tension to hold the readers' interest. The relationship between Mackenzie and Logan is coming along nicely.
In UK English 'goodbye' is one word - not sure about the US.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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The family scene is realistically portrayed. The sequence of the lost keys was natural but also injected a little tension to hold the readers' interest. The relationship between Mackenzie and Logan is coming along nicely.
In UK English 'goodbye' is one word - not sure about the US.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tootsie55
Yay! More SIXES! As we said elsewhere an9other great read. You always have us feeling we are right there and a part of the scene. Tenets of good writing I reckon. Great pic too.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Yay! More SIXES! As we said elsewhere an9other great read. You always have us feeling we are right there and a part of the scene. Tenets of good writing I reckon. Great pic too.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
As I've come to expect, another excellent continuation. Liked the sexual tension between Logan and McKenzie. They obviously have feelings for towards one another, though both deny they feel this way. The flow was spot on, the dialogue and interactions between your characters as well. Excellent balance between showing and telling. Well done!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Good morning, Barbara
As I've come to expect, another excellent continuation. Liked the sexual tension between Logan and McKenzie. They obviously have feelings for towards one another, though both deny they feel this way. The flow was spot on, the dialogue and interactions between your characters as well. Excellent balance between showing and telling. Well done!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Goody! Still SIXES left. Once again a great chapter and continued good reading. Getting closer to my move outta here. Funny money building up as I am not sure if I wanna post anything any6more. Might do a complete book review/promotion offering of one of my others. Thanks again.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Goody! Still SIXES left. Once again a great chapter and continued good reading. Getting closer to my move outta here. Funny money building up as I am not sure if I wanna post anything any6more. Might do a complete book review/promotion offering of one of my others. Thanks again.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This work in progress romantic chapter continues sparking your craft and art and original style of taletelling, dialogues are realistic and contributory, glowing; lovely ending; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This work in progress romantic chapter continues sparking your craft and art and original style of taletelling, dialogues are realistic and contributory, glowing; lovely ending; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I have to chuckle at these two. Love is working hard and it seems they may be on to something about the murder. Hard to fool parents. LOL. Good one Barb.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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I have to chuckle at these two. Love is working hard and it seems they may be on to something about the murder. Hard to fool parents. LOL. Good one Barb.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Leaving you now Barb. Too old to cut the mustard anymore. You are to me an excellent write and no doubt a good teacher. Thank you all these years for being my friend. May our Lord Jesus bless and keep you.
Comment from DonandVicki
I have enjoyed your story because you know how to end a chapter keeping the reader wanting more and in suspense. Your romance story is a welcome respite from reality.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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I have enjoyed your story because you know how to end a chapter keeping the reader wanting more and in suspense. Your romance story is a welcome respite from reality.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I like this chapter where you are sill written how of how
McKenzie is trying to figure who killed Megan.
I smile of how you wrote about there may be a romance yet to come with McKenzie and Logan.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Hello Barb
I like this chapter where you are sill written how of how
McKenzie is trying to figure who killed Megan.
I smile of how you wrote about there may be a romance yet to come with McKenzie and Logan.
Gert
Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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LOL I appreciate your kind review.
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Hello Barbara
You are welcome.
Gert
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Liked your story. Sounds like a good mystery. I'll check out the prior chapters of your book.....It's good to know what the plots are before this chapter. I have to do some catching up.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Liked your story. Sounds like a good mystery. I'll check out the prior chapters of your book.....It's good to know what the plots are before this chapter. I have to do some catching up.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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I hope you enjoy. Thank you for the encouragement.
