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Comment from judiverse
Great flash fiction entry. The empath makes an interesting character. (I think there was one of those on one of the later and inferior Star Trek series.) I like the twist you add to this. When she encounters the man in the park and he threatens her, her touch causes all the sorrow and guilt to leave him. How interesting that she tries to take her life and the man is able to prevent it with his touch. She has apparently passed her power along to him. judi
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Great flash fiction entry. The empath makes an interesting character. (I think there was one of those on one of the later and inferior Star Trek series.) I like the twist you add to this. When she encounters the man in the park and he threatens her, her touch causes all the sorrow and guilt to leave him. How interesting that she tries to take her life and the man is able to prevent it with his touch. She has apparently passed her power along to him. judi
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Judi, for the terrific review. Bill
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You're very welcome. Excellent story, and best of luck. judi
Comment from Gloria ....
Whoa, this is really good, Bill. I can imagine there would be residual memory after the healing had taken place. But that thought doesn't occur until after reading your terrific story.
You have such an original and creative mind. Wishing you all good luck with the Committee.
Gloria
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Whoa, this is really good, Bill. I can imagine there would be residual memory after the healing had taken place. But that thought doesn't occur until after reading your terrific story.
You have such an original and creative mind. Wishing you all good luck with the Committee.
Gloria
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Thanks, Gloria, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
Now that's a super power worth having! I think we need more of those people instead of all those noisy politicians who just seem to do the opposite - reaching in to the inner destructiveness and bringing it out!
Best to you in the contest, Bill!
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Now that's a super power worth having! I think we need more of those people instead of all those noisy politicians who just seem to do the opposite - reaching in to the inner destructiveness and bringing it out!
Best to you in the contest, Bill!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks, lyenochka. Yes, this would be a neat trick, as long as you can live through it.
Comment from nomi338
A clear warning for all do 'gooders'. Be careful that you do not become too skilled at doing good, it might come back to bite you in an uncomfortable place. Nice story, it gave me a dose of the warm fuzzes.
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A clear warning for all do 'gooders'. Be careful that you do not become too skilled at doing good, it might come back to bite you in an uncomfortable place. Nice story, it gave me a dose of the warm fuzzes.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks, nomi. It?s a contest so I let her live.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Bill. An excellent flash fiction. Wow! Where does your mind go? This looks like a winner to me. Well worded, concise, well described. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
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Hi Bill. An excellent flash fiction. Wow! Where does your mind go? This looks like a winner to me. Well worded, concise, well described. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
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Thank you, Marilyn, for the encouraging review. Bill
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story in exactly 100 words. I thought the approach clever as it is rare I see empaths referenced in anything here - I am sure the novelty of the topic will serve you well. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a complete story in exactly 100 words. I thought the approach clever as it is rare I see empaths referenced in anything here - I am sure the novelty of the topic will serve you well. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks, MA, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is an interesting piece of flash fiction. It intrigued me. Not many pieces this short merit a re-read, but I did so with this one {smiles}.
I didn't pick up on any spags.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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This is an interesting piece of flash fiction. It intrigued me. Not many pieces this short merit a re-read, but I did so with this one {smiles}.
I didn't pick up on any spags.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Alex.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now there's an unexpected tale, Sir Bill -- even better than one of those twist endings! Very cool. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
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Wow -- now there's an unexpected tale, Sir Bill -- even better than one of those twist endings! Very cool. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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It?s a contest, so I kept Patty from hurting herself. That irony doesn?t appeal to judges.
Comment from Sylvia Page
The stranger held her arm until the moment passed. They helped each other or was it a lesson for the man not to mistrust everyone. Great storytelling. Wish you the best.
Sylvia
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The stranger held her arm until the moment passed. They helped each other or was it a lesson for the man not to mistrust everyone. Great storytelling. Wish you the best.
Sylvia
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Just an idea of how long a few seconds of someone else?s ailment can be life-changing.
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
I have heard of empaths. So happy I don't know any that live to this extreme. I do have friends that can't help but share your emotions - if you cry, they cry, if you laugh, they laugh, etc. Interesting story. Thanks!
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Bill,
I have heard of empaths. So happy I don't know any that live to this extreme. I do have friends that can't help but share your emotions - if you cry, they cry, if you laugh, they laugh, etc. Interesting story. Thanks!
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Robyn, for giving this a look. Bill