The Gray
Man's modern struggle.17 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I thought this was going to be free verse but appropriately for a subject locked into the grey, this is tied iambicly to an opening tetrameter followed by ten lines of diameter in each stanza.
The rhyme scheme is interesting too with some slight deviations from an alternately rhyming plan that prevents it from being too grey.
A thought-provoking read.
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I thought this was going to be free verse but appropriately for a subject locked into the grey, this is tied iambicly to an opening tetrameter followed by ten lines of diameter in each stanza.
The rhyme scheme is interesting too with some slight deviations from an alternately rhyming plan that prevents it from being too grey.
A thought-provoking read.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Elizabeth Johnson1
Wow. What an incredibly deep and creative poem. I'm sorry for your gray. I hope you get more color in your life if this is in fact true.
Paints a vivd feeling and picture.
Very well done
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Wow. What an incredibly deep and creative poem. I'm sorry for your gray. I hope you get more color in your life if this is in fact true.
Paints a vivd feeling and picture.
Very well done
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent. Good rhyme in a powerful poem. I can't see any extra work or corrections needed. You have done an excellent job. I like the way you started each stanza.
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Excellent. Good rhyme in a powerful poem. I can't see any extra work or corrections needed. You have done an excellent job. I like the way you started each stanza.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Patty Palmer
Seems the gray has been accepted totally form where ever you are. At night with the grays and the sky. He's accustom to the strands of gray hanging down and swirled around her face.
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Seems the gray has been accepted totally form where ever you are. At night with the grays and the sky. He's accustom to the strands of gray hanging down and swirled around her face.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Karen Luciana
Hi Clockwise,
I really like your poem. You are a good writer. You made good use or repetition, rhyme, and strong verses. I also notice alliteration and assonance. All of these writing techniques make your piece a well crafted poem.
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Hi Clockwise,
I really like your poem. You are a good writer. You made good use or repetition, rhyme, and strong verses. I also notice alliteration and assonance. All of these writing techniques make your piece a well crafted poem.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a back case of depression here and living inside the grey is a metaphor for feeling down and in the shadows, a poignant write and so many suffer from this these days, love Dolly x
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This sounds like a back case of depression here and living inside the grey is a metaphor for feeling down and in the shadows, a poignant write and so many suffer from this these days, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Earl Corp
If this isn't a contest entry it should be. Some never become accustomed to the gray. But you touched on wherever there is gray in our lives. Your poem rhymes, made sense, and made me think. Very nice job.
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If this isn't a contest entry it should be. Some never become accustomed to the gray. But you touched on wherever there is gray in our lives. Your poem rhymes, made sense, and made me think. Very nice job.
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
