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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "St. Louis Chapter 7 part 2"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Sankey
Great reading once again. Glad the SIXES are back again. Can see the romance getting closer perhaps. Still your usual good storytelling style. One spag. "No. When (are)we going?"
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Great reading once again. Glad the SIXES are back again. Can see the romance getting closer perhaps. Still your usual good storytelling style. One spag. "No. When (are)we going?"
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Often during conversation we leave the little words out. I know it's wrong, but we do. Thank you for the kind review.
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No worries as I have said I call it a West Coast syndrome where someone posts "couple" this or that and leaves the "of" out after hehe.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This seems to be quite a mystery. Full of intrigue! I like you put these two on the flirting path, and I hope he wins her over! I have not seen any previous chapters, but I definitely want to start at the beginning. Sad though that the brother has to learn of the nit so nice behaviors of his family. That is a difficult one. I will be looking forward to your future chapters! :)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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This seems to be quite a mystery. Full of intrigue! I like you put these two on the flirting path, and I hope he wins her over! I have not seen any previous chapters, but I definitely want to start at the beginning. Sad though that the brother has to learn of the nit so nice behaviors of his family. That is a difficult one. I will be looking forward to your future chapters! :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope you come back.
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Very welcome and I definitely will!
Comment from diamondbogle
I really liked this. It flowed well and I didnt see any mistakes. I like how I got a clear image in my head of what I believed was happening. Overall very well done.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I really liked this. It flowed well and I didnt see any mistakes. I like how I got a clear image in my head of what I believed was happening. Overall very well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from SLMorrical
I wonder if Logan was watching her talk to Kate. Logan is in for a surprise when he listens to the recorder. Logan again to the rescue for Mac. I think that Mac asking Logan what he is looking for in a wife is a subtle hint. They are definitely getting closer. I love this romance part of the story. I think Mac needs to look at old cases, because it is becoming very obvious someone is out to hurt her. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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I wonder if Logan was watching her talk to Kate. Logan is in for a surprise when he listens to the recorder. Logan again to the rescue for Mac. I think that Mac asking Logan what he is looking for in a wife is a subtle hint. They are definitely getting closer. I love this romance part of the story. I think Mac needs to look at old cases, because it is becoming very obvious someone is out to hurt her. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Yes somebody is out to hurt her. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sylvia Page
Barbara, You got me hooked. I haven't read your previous chapters, maybe I will go back if I can find the time, but I think I have an idea. Now that man, who do you think he was and what was his motive in trying to accost McKenzie? Fortunate enough that Logan was close at hand. I think there's something building up there. Well done. Looking forward to read more.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Barbara, You got me hooked. I haven't read your previous chapters, maybe I will go back if I can find the time, but I think I have an idea. Now that man, who do you think he was and what was his motive in trying to accost McKenzie? Fortunate enough that Logan was close at hand. I think there's something building up there. Well done. Looking forward to read more.
Sylvia
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I'm glad you stopped by.
Comment from royowen
And so, the love lines are being drawn, a part a lot overlook, or they see it anyhow. Loved this episode, they're getting near the answer to a lot of things, but no know more about Megan than they did. But now it's Mack who wants to defend Logan. Where's that phone? Well done, great episode Barbara, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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And so, the love lines are being drawn, a part a lot overlook, or they see it anyhow. Loved this episode, they're getting near the answer to a lot of things, but no know more about Megan than they did. But now it's Mack who wants to defend Logan. Where's that phone? Well done, great episode Barbara, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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The phone is a mystery. Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done
Comment from susand3022
Hi Barbara, I hate having to say this to people but I only want to have to say this to you once... please... stop apologizing for posting an entire 1500 words! Like it's some devastating length or something. Oh, Good Lord! I think I'm just going to DIE if I ever have to read that many words! LOL (I'm sorry, it's just one of my pet peeves... I mean, it's a WRITING site!) Should everyone keep their writing to a minimum in a novel? (has anyone read a real one?) I'm sure chapters are longer than 1500 words! LOL
Okay... so, who is this man who would walk up in broad daylight and try to accost our gal on the street! Unbelievable! Good thing our knight in shining armor showed up and rescued her! :)
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Hi Barbara, I hate having to say this to people but I only want to have to say this to you once... please... stop apologizing for posting an entire 1500 words! Like it's some devastating length or something. Oh, Good Lord! I think I'm just going to DIE if I ever have to read that many words! LOL (I'm sorry, it's just one of my pet peeves... I mean, it's a WRITING site!) Should everyone keep their writing to a minimum in a novel? (has anyone read a real one?) I'm sure chapters are longer than 1500 words! LOL
Okay... so, who is this man who would walk up in broad daylight and try to accost our gal on the street! Unbelievable! Good thing our knight in shining armor showed up and rescued her! :)
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Many people won't read posts that long. Really, they are only reading to get FS money. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, yeah it was quite scary how she met her dearh. very wellwritten as you take us throught the steps. I like your story a lot and I'm looking forward to reading along. All best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Hi Barbara, yeah it was quite scary how she met her dearh. very wellwritten as you take us throught the steps. I like your story a lot and I'm looking forward to reading along. All best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent story. It must have hurt Logan to hear about his sister's risky life style, but knowing about her habits is the only way to discover who murdered her. That was a scary encounter that Mac had with the man who grabbed her arm, and she didn't know who he was. Good thing Logan was there, although she resents his baby-sitting her. Jose will provide good back-up when Mac goes to the Tin Roof. Logan is still quite concerned about Mac's safety, though. It does make sense that she'll learn more if she goes by herself. Great developments. judi
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Excellent story. It must have hurt Logan to hear about his sister's risky life style, but knowing about her habits is the only way to discover who murdered her. That was a scary encounter that Mac had with the man who grabbed her arm, and she didn't know who he was. Good thing Logan was there, although she resents his baby-sitting her. Jose will provide good back-up when Mac goes to the Tin Roof. Logan is still quite concerned about Mac's safety, though. It does make sense that she'll learn more if she goes by herself. Great developments. judi
Comment Written 23-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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You're very welcome. judi
