Piss Foam
Ode contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
To each his own as to what they choose to glorify. It brought to mind the elderly who have so much trouble urinating that to see the foam is perceived as a huge blessing. The rhyme and meter are consistent throughout making for an easy read. Good luck in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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To each his own as to what they choose to glorify. It brought to mind the elderly who have so much trouble urinating that to see the foam is perceived as a huge blessing. The rhyme and meter are consistent throughout making for an easy read. Good luck in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Mystic A. I wasn't actually glorifying it, just the folks who would take the time to actually read something so preposterously titled. I appreciate the gracious stars. Have a wonderful day.
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Not so silly as you did get quite a few votes LOL.
Comment from LyndaS
LMAO!!! I've been awake for 20 minutes and laughing my ass off. It almost hurts. Haven't even had my coffee yet. This is brilliant and clever. LOVE the pic on this one. It's even a well written ODE. For me!!! HA!HA! You got me good. I predict this will go far. I hope it makes it to the front page and this title just makes Tom nuts. LOL! Well done, poet. This was great. What a great way to start off a very busy day. Lynda
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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LMAO!!! I've been awake for 20 minutes and laughing my ass off. It almost hurts. Haven't even had my coffee yet. This is brilliant and clever. LOVE the pic on this one. It's even a well written ODE. For me!!! HA!HA! You got me good. I predict this will go far. I hope it makes it to the front page and this title just makes Tom nuts. LOL! Well done, poet. This was great. What a great way to start off a very busy day. Lynda
Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for the great review and the huge sixer, Lynda. Yeah, I had to do a little searching until I finally came across the perfect picture to go with this ridiculous piece. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars, L. I'm glad you had a chuckle out of this silliness. Thank you again. Have a great night.
Ron
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How can 'piss foam' make it to the front page? Easy. You need a fearless warrior who knows how to rhyme shit. Well done, dude!!!
Comment from tfawcus
I would normally suggest that the correct term is to whet one's appetite, or sharpen it. However, in this case, it may be that you actually did mean to wet my appetite
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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I would normally suggest that the correct term is to whet one's appetite, or sharpen it. However, in this case, it may be that you actually did mean to wet my appetite
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Tony. Yeah, I went and added author notes for the 'wet' rather than 'whet.' I was just trying to be a little more ridiculous with wordplay. I really appreciate the generous stars. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ha! So perhaps the warning should have read 'May have IM-mature content.'
I've seen a few entries in this content and I am surprised how many have chosen to write humorous odes. Yours is a cheeky little piece with an inventive approach - an ode to the reader. Nice rhyme and meter too.
'wet' should be 'whet' I think.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Ha! So perhaps the warning should have read 'May have IM-mature content.'
I've seen a few entries in this content and I am surprised how many have chosen to write humorous odes. Yours is a cheeky little piece with an inventive approach - an ode to the reader. Nice rhyme and meter too.
'wet' should be 'whet' I think.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Wow, thank you for the great review and big sixer, Steve. I sure wasn't planning on seeing one of those. Lol. I'll give the whet some more thought. I was trying to be humorous, going with the whole fluids thing buy using wet rather than whet. We'll see. I really appreciate the generous rating, friend. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great rest of your weekend. Thank you again.