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Love Long Distance

Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "No Poppies, Please! - Chapter 4"
A Wartime Romance

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Comment from Mrs. KT
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Hello Cathy!
Well-crafted and entertaining, although I am not certain that entertaining is your intention, but I had to smile regarding the references to Elizabeth Taylor and the Dave Clark Five! Also note the mother's reluctance to mail the letter. Realistic; that is for certain ... if she doesn't want her daughter to be hurt in case something should happen.
Engaging and realistic!

Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Diane, for stopping by to read and review Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. We're glad you enjoyed it, finding it engaging and realistic. Much appreciate you following along. Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from diamondbogle
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I liked your story. I thought it flowed nicely and I didnt see any major mistakes. I like that it can be read sort of independent of the original story but yet it makes me want to read previous chapters. Good job.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi There! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and review this chapter! We would love for you to read the previous chapters and to follow along as we move forward. Chapter 5 will be coming soon!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hey Cathy. Well girl driving a "Gremlin" might have been your first mistake in a car accident lol ...

From a writing perspective there is nothing wrong with this, You and Bill have a great way to communicate with each other and the emotion is both innocent and enchanting.

Good luck. xoxo Kiwi


 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi Kiwi! Thanks so much for stopping by again to read Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Funny remark about the Gremlins! lol... Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
    xoxo
Comment from Sophia Delgado
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I can feel the love deep within these letters. The font is a bit hard to read on my end, but I was able to get through it without too much trouble. Often, when people write fictitious letters, they feel made-up, but these letters feel genuine and meaningful.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi Sophia! So glad you stopped by to read and review Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Thank you! That you can feel the love in the letters means so much to us. Sorry the font is hard to read. I think it depends on what you read it on. It's done that way to look like handwriting. Hope you come back to read Chapter 5. It's in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Ulla
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Hi to both of you.This was two lovely letters with quite a lot of information and happenings. Yes, it does sound as if Cathy had a close call with the car accident, and Bill is being kept busy with his training. Quite daunting. I'm looking forward to reading more. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi from both of us! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Your continued support means a great deal to both of us and we are honored. You are an awesome writer! Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon. All the best to you too! :)))
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Mistydawn
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This is a well-written, interesting chapter. Your character's thoughts, dialogue seem real, believable, showing how hard a long distance love affair can actually be. I do hope the missile doesn't blow up.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. Much appreciate your comments and glad you found this to be well written and interesting. Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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Really well done, I saw no errors except too much spacing between a few words, but no big deal. The story is interesting and fun to read. Both my brothers and cousins were in the Viet Nam war. One of the worst, but mostly because of how badly our men were treated by all the protesters. An ugly time. Looking forward to the next chapter. Rox

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi Rox! Thanks for stopping by to read and review Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. So glad you found it interesting and fun to read. Thank you also for sharing about your brothers and cousins. We're happy you are following along as we write and post this book. Chapter 5 is currently in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your collaboration in chapter 4, Bill & Cathy. Even if I knew nothing of the storyline, the title clearly speaks of war with the inclusion of the word "poppies."

The words flow smoothly creating great imagery giving readers the feeling of witnessing this firsthand. The inclusion of the events from the time period of the 60's adds to the authenticity of this chapter. I like how you add those details. Otherwise this would be too 'cut and dried.' I believe Cathy is adding those to fill in current events AND help her deal with the separation due to Bill's enlistment. The Liz Taylor references are true and so many discussed them and/or know about them. I believe the same about the reference to JDurante and his nose. He used that himself to show that his nose was part of the package deal.

The letter from Bill is awesome. It shows his feelings for home in a time that makes him appreciate his family and early life even more when he will soon face the unknown. The discussion of his training with explosives is done with great detail but at the same time it is easy for readers to understand.

How sad that your mother did not mail the letter as promised but, eventually it was received.

The way Bill writes to 'don't put poppies on my grave' makes me think if that came to be, then he would not want them there as a constant reminder of the war. He would wish for you to remember the times you and he were together in happier times.
Thanks for sharing,, Cathy & Bill.
Excellent!
Jan

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi Jan! Thank you SO MUCH for your AWESOME 6-stars and review. WE SALUTE YOU! You always give such great reviews! We really appreciate you sharing in such detail here what you like about this chapter, and we're so glad you enjoyed reading it. Chapter 5 is now in the works and coming soon!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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While we were stationed in Germany, I remember seeing numerous fields over flowing with poppies. They were beautiful, but I also paused and remembered the poem. I enjoyed reading this and you two are doing a marvelous job writing it.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Hi Barbara! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We're so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you also for sharing about the poppies. Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written chapter you both have put together again. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. You come up with very good things to write about in these letters. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
    Thank you, Teri, for reading and reviewing Chapter 4 of Love Long Distance. We are so glad you found it well written and like the things we write about. Much appreciated you following along. Chapter 5 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy