The Final Tally
A Shakespearan Sonnet for the Sonnet Contest34 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
"We're on the stage in nature's own ballet..." <--- I love this! In fact, I think this is a well-written sonnet, Yvonne, the turn especially moving/thought-provoking. This should do well! Best of luck.
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"We're on the stage in nature's own ballet..." <--- I love this! In fact, I think this is a well-written sonnet, Yvonne, the turn especially moving/thought-provoking. This should do well! Best of luck.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you, Dawn. I'm glad you think so.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
A perfect sonnet, Yvonne, and what it says is so true. We don't have a choice where and to whom we are born, we have to get on with it and try and make the right choices later. I wasn't born to wealthy parents, but I was born into a gold mine of love. Your poem was an absolute delight to read, my friend. I do love sonnets. :)) Sandra xx
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A perfect sonnet, Yvonne, and what it says is so true. We don't have a choice where and to whom we are born, we have to get on with it and try and make the right choices later. I wasn't born to wealthy parents, but I was born into a gold mine of love. Your poem was an absolute delight to read, my friend. I do love sonnets. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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I'm am so flattered by this review, Sandra. Thank you so very much. Like you, I wasn't born to wealth, but in all things that matter, I'm a very rich woman. 8-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the path that is laid out for us from the day of our birth till death, we have no control over the beginning or the end but what we do in between is what will determine our fate.
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A very well-written sonnet about the path that is laid out for us from the day of our birth till death, we have no control over the beginning or the end but what we do in between is what will determine our fate.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Exactly. Thank you for seeing that. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, what a lovely way to say 'life sucks, but we go with what we got cuz there's always the next Act'... and, hopefully, if we play this Act's cards right, the next one will be better! ;) :) I'm no judge of sonnets, Yvonne, as they are certainly not in my wheelhouse, but I absolutely love your sentiments here, ma'am.... and your font/chosen pic really just reinforce the meditative aura of this one.... :) :) Thanx for sharing, Beautiful Poet, and best of luck to you in the contest! ;) ;) Yvette
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Oh, what a lovely way to say 'life sucks, but we go with what we got cuz there's always the next Act'... and, hopefully, if we play this Act's cards right, the next one will be better! ;) :) I'm no judge of sonnets, Yvonne, as they are certainly not in my wheelhouse, but I absolutely love your sentiments here, ma'am.... and your font/chosen pic really just reinforce the meditative aura of this one.... :) :) Thanx for sharing, Beautiful Poet, and best of luck to you in the contest! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Thank you for this beautiful review. I'm glad it struck a chord with you.
Comment from zanya
An inspirational, metaphorical sonnet with some of life's great existential questions explored and in such exquisite language 'dance our best until the bell's last knell' Even the font choses is appropriate and the visual !
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An inspirational, metaphorical sonnet with some of life's great existential questions explored and in such exquisite language 'dance our best until the bell's last knell' Even the font choses is appropriate and the visual !
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review and lovely comments. 8-)
Comment from Mastery
Nice job on this sonnet, Yvonne. They are not the easiest poetry to write, I know. I liked these lines in particular:
"It doesn't matter what the hand that's laid
before us, but the tally when it's played."
Good job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Nice job on this sonnet, Yvonne. They are not the easiest poetry to write, I know. I liked these lines in particular:
"It doesn't matter what the hand that's laid
before us, but the tally when it's played."
Good job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Thank you, my friend. That's my favorite, too. Like minds . . ..
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Very well written, Yvonne. Bob
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Yvonne,
Your sonnet resonates with memorable thoughts, and it is written in the correct format. The following thought truly touched me:
To watch my loved one 'til all hope has died
is more than any soul should have to bear.
If I may, I have read the first line at least three times, and I believe there is an error: The life we're born to in (is) no way our choice.
My apologies if I have misinterpreted.
Thank you for sharing.
diane
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Hello Yvonne,
Your sonnet resonates with memorable thoughts, and it is written in the correct format. The following thought truly touched me:
To watch my loved one 'til all hope has died
is more than any soul should have to bear.
If I may, I have read the first line at least three times, and I believe there is an error: The life we're born to in (is) no way our choice.
My apologies if I have misinterpreted.
Thank you for sharing.
diane
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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I should have put a comma there maybe to make it clearer. Thanks for reviewing and watching my back.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Good Job with your sonnet, Yvonne. You followed the rhyme scheme and you meter seemed to be spot on. Nice picture. The font could be smaller but that is your choice. A proper sonnet and a good entry for the contest. I saw nothing wrong. Nancy:)
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Good Job with your sonnet, Yvonne. You followed the rhyme scheme and you meter seemed to be spot on. Nice picture. The font could be smaller but that is your choice. A proper sonnet and a good entry for the contest. I saw nothing wrong. Nancy:)
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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I made the font so big because some complained it was too small. (Sigh). Thanks for reviewing. I appreciate your input.
Comment from Eric M McChesney
This was a really great poem about life and dealing with the hand we were dealt with. You gave hope where there was none and you understood that there may be grief, however, if we take command of our life, happiness could be in the cards. Great Job, really enjoyed this!
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This was a really great poem about life and dealing with the hand we were dealt with. You gave hope where there was none and you understood that there may be grief, however, if we take command of our life, happiness could be in the cards. Great Job, really enjoyed this!
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate your lovely remarks.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments of your sonnet. I struggled to make sense of the couplet although I have a vague idea what you mean. Line 10 has only 9 syllables, best of luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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I enjoyed the sentiments of your sonnet. I struggled to make sense of the couplet although I have a vague idea what you mean. Line 10 has only 9 syllables, best of luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2019
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Eeeek. I'll take a look at that. Thank you.