Fingers of Mist
A 5-7-5 poem22 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What a cool picture and loved your poem with the mist fingering the summer forest. And I wonder why the deer hesitates - perhaps he hasn't found my flowers yet. Lol.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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What a cool picture and loved your poem with the mist fingering the summer forest. And I wonder why the deer hesitates - perhaps he hasn't found my flowers yet. Lol.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hello Helen. No, he is trying to find your yard through the mist.... honing in right onto you. LOL Thanks a bunch!!
Melissa
Comment from Heather Knight
I love the title of your poem, Melissa.
Why does the deer hesitate? I assume he's afraid because he cannot see...
Thanks for sharing your lovely little post.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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I love the title of your poem, Melissa.
Why does the deer hesitate? I assume he's afraid because he cannot see...
Thanks for sharing your lovely little post.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Maria!
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
You've painted a vivid picture of a misty day in the reader's mind. Your artwork is beautiful, perfect for the poem. I've never really thought about it, but I imagine that would make an animal pause.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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You've painted a vivid picture of a misty day in the reader's mind. Your artwork is beautiful, perfect for the poem. I've never really thought about it, but I imagine that would make an animal pause.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hi, Misty. Yes, I think they are very uncertain in the foggy mist. Thanks!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- what a feeling of early morning anticipation your words carry here, Melissa! :) You've done an awesome job of portraying a scene and putting your reader right smack in the middle... in only 17 syllables! :) Good luck in the contest! :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Wow -- what a feeling of early morning anticipation your words carry here, Melissa! :) You've done an awesome job of portraying a scene and putting your reader right smack in the middle... in only 17 syllables! :) Good luck in the contest! :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much, Yvette, for your great comments. I really appreciate your time and review.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your impressive 5-7-5 makes effective use of all its syllables to convey the theme. The lovely nature scene features the deer, ever cautious in its surroundings.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Your impressive 5-7-5 makes effective use of all its syllables to convey the theme. The lovely nature scene features the deer, ever cautious in its surroundings.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Janice!!
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Melissa!
Stunningly beautiful and contemplative. A snapshot of my world and its surroundings. We so love it when the deer visit our property...and they do all year long! Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Good Morning, Melissa!
Stunningly beautiful and contemplative. A snapshot of my world and its surroundings. We so love it when the deer visit our property...and they do all year long! Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Good Morning, Diane. Thank you. I am glad to get a peek into your world and how you enjoy it!!
Melissa
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Mellissa, this is a lovely 5/7/5 in perfect form. Very poetic with the perfect picture. Good use of metaphor in lines one and two. (one deer hesitate(s) - Lovely work. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hello Mellissa, this is a lovely 5/7/5 in perfect form. Very poetic with the perfect picture. Good use of metaphor in lines one and two. (one deer hesitate(s) - Lovely work. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Dorothy, for a lovely review.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
This Haiku-like verse is so easy to see in my mind with your descriptive words.
Mist caressing the forest is great imagery. And your selected illustration reflects your last satori-like line.
While deer is both singular and plural, the illustration shows just one. So it is your poetic choice if the last line becomes: the deer hesitates.
As you know, I favor these short ones. LOL
Mark
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Melissa,
This Haiku-like verse is so easy to see in my mind with your descriptive words.
Mist caressing the forest is great imagery. And your selected illustration reflects your last satori-like line.
While deer is both singular and plural, the illustration shows just one. So it is your poetic choice if the last line becomes: the deer hesitates.
As you know, I favor these short ones. LOL
Mark
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Mark. I plan to edit that to hesitates.
Melissa
Comment from Rachelle Allen
OMG, Melissa!! Your knack for outstanding poetry is amazing. This one made me just shake my head with how simple-yet-perfect it is. And then this picture!!! Oy. It has Winner of the Contest written ALL over it! Good luck to you - though you will NOT be needing it. xo
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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OMG, Melissa!! Your knack for outstanding poetry is amazing. This one made me just shake my head with how simple-yet-perfect it is. And then this picture!!! Oy. It has Winner of the Contest written ALL over it! Good luck to you - though you will NOT be needing it. xo
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Haha, Rachelle. I love your enthusiasm and how it lifts my spirits. I really appreciate your wonderful review.
Melissa
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That's how I feel about your writing!! xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I dare say that the deer are much more hesitant in the mist as they rely on their instincts even more because they can't immediately see danger, you painted am interesting picture here Melissa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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I dare say that the deer are much more hesitant in the mist as they rely on their instincts even more because they can't immediately see danger, you painted am interesting picture here Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Dolly, for your lovely comments. I think I need to change the last word to hesitates since the picture contains a single deer. Anyway, that is what the reviewers are saying. much appreciated!
Melissa