Renewal
the sparrow51 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Interesting poem, Doug.
Personally, I'd love to be able to fly.
You know...off we go into the wild blue yonder, flying high into the sun...and all that?
Unfortunately, my wings were clipped a long time ago.
The nice thing about clipped wings is that your feathers will eventually grow back, good as new.
Good stuff, buddy.
~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Interesting poem, Doug.
Personally, I'd love to be able to fly.
You know...off we go into the wild blue yonder, flying high into the sun...and all that?
Unfortunately, my wings were clipped a long time ago.
The nice thing about clipped wings is that your feathers will eventually grow back, good as new.
Good stuff, buddy.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hi Dean. Thank you.
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Yep, you bet.
Comment from LIJ Red
One line in the Bible troubles me...I think it was a priest looking for tithes that said a man is worth many sparrows...love the way street sparrows dodge the tires...excellent post.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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One line in the Bible troubles me...I think it was a priest looking for tithes that said a man is worth many sparrows...love the way street sparrows dodge the tires...excellent post.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Artasylum
Victor... this is so beautifully penned...
What if we all could just...
innocence, and grin,
and fly again?
another strong piece... thanks so much... diana
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Victor... this is so beautifully penned...
What if we all could just...
innocence, and grin,
and fly again?
another strong piece... thanks so much... diana
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Diana.
Comment from Yvon
An interesting piece of hope for a new beginning. Sometimes it would be nice to think that we could just fly away from our problems. Had to read it twice slowly the second time pausing at each line to get the full effect. 'Innocence, and grin' seems odd. Maybe 'innocently grin'?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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An interesting piece of hope for a new beginning. Sometimes it would be nice to think that we could just fly away from our problems. Had to read it twice slowly the second time pausing at each line to get the full effect. 'Innocence, and grin' seems odd. Maybe 'innocently grin'?
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Well...I write like I write. But, thank you.
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Okay and touche. Ha ha ha. Smile
Comment from tfawcus
A delicate study in the regrets which inevitably accompany old age. Would that we could return once more to the innocence of former years and learn how to fly again. There is great strength in the delicate structure of this poem. One might almost relate it to the bone structure of the bird that is your metaphor here.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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A delicate study in the regrets which inevitably accompany old age. Would that we could return once more to the innocence of former years and learn how to fly again. There is great strength in the delicate structure of this poem. One might almost relate it to the bone structure of the bird that is your metaphor here.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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An interesting relation. Thank you. I do appreciate your reading of me.
Comment from 24chas
I enjoyed this read, Victortouche. I really liked the flow to this one. The emotion was plain to see and the ending was really wistful to me. Nice job of writing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed this read, Victortouche. I really liked the flow to this one. The emotion was plain to see and the ending was really wistful to me. Nice job of writing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I think that this speaks to all of us who want to escape all of our troubles and painful situations and just fly away. I've felt this way many times. This is really good Victor. I like the message conveyed and the accompanying artwork. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I think that this speaks to all of us who want to escape all of our troubles and painful situations and just fly away. I've felt this way many times. This is really good Victor. I like the message conveyed and the accompanying artwork. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Jeffrey.
Comment from estory
I liked the rhythm of the free verse in the little stanzas, much like the flapping of a bird in flight. And the image of the bird in flight is a great metaphor for moving on, leaving behind the regrets and frustrations and seeking out the fresh and invigorating possibilities ahead. estory
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I liked the rhythm of the free verse in the little stanzas, much like the flapping of a bird in flight. And the image of the bird in flight is a great metaphor for moving on, leaving behind the regrets and frustrations and seeking out the fresh and invigorating possibilities ahead. estory
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Doug. What an ingenious piece of poetry this truly is. Your style is uniques as I have told you in the ast on occasion. I like the free and easy feel of your writing:
" could start to fly,
and feel that sky begin.
This time, real time."
Bravo, my friend! Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hi, Doug. What an ingenious piece of poetry this truly is. Your style is uniques as I have told you in the ast on occasion. I like the free and easy feel of your writing:
" could start to fly,
and feel that sky begin.
This time, real time."
Bravo, my friend! Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Bob.
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful thought to be a cheeky sparrow to fluff up feathers at the snow and to fly again
I think I'd prefer to be a lark....song so beautiful
I love this....I wonder if sparrows feel God who knows everyone of them
God bless...I loved it
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Beautiful thought to be a cheeky sparrow to fluff up feathers at the snow and to fly again
I think I'd prefer to be a lark....song so beautiful
I love this....I wonder if sparrows feel God who knows everyone of them
God bless...I loved it
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you.