Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi EK!

Not sure if you remember me from some years ago, but I remember how much I always enjoyed reading your work! :-)

This is another great piece you have crafted here.

This is very well written! I only have one teeny suggestion for your consideration. It is just as she is leaving to go into rehab the first time:

". I don't think they came to see her"

I believe you might want to consider changing "came" to "went."

This is also a huge societal problem you are tackling in this story.

You know, I love it when art takes on problems to heighten awareness and to break down stigmas.

I've worked as an addiction counselor over the years, and I can assure you that your story is right on the mark. This happens a lot, sadly.

Thank you for sharing your great work. I look forward to reading more of your current work. :-)

Jan

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on the story. Personal experience was the only resource that could come up with something so effective as this story. It is absolutely necessary to the writing of pieces like this. But I am glad that someone like you who has such experience in this found it so moving. It means the story was good. estory

reply by HealingMuse on 09-Feb-2019

Hi Estory,

You are most welcome for the review. I'm delighted to see you are still here and writing! :-)

Jan

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

Such a moving and emotional story. Some relationships are like this. He does seem a little codependent and I wonder if it is a good idea for him to keep waiting. Though, they say the third time is the charm. I do think Julie has to believe in herself and the power to get well. She is quick to make excuses and hide things--not a good sign.

Your storytelling style is nice and easy. I enjoyed this very much,

~Mustang Patty~

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on the story. Coming from you, I am pleased you liked it so much. I think you are spot on with the analysis of the characters; but that's life, isn't it? We have to struggle through the failings of others, if we truly love them. Everyone needs someone, and everyone needs to be needed. So we have these two, stumbling into each other's arms, around the maze of life. This was sort of up your alley and I am glad you liked it. estory

Comment from Candace Nola

Excellent

Thought this very well written. The dialogue was good and you could sense his inner struggle. Very sad situation for anyone to deal with and those emotions were properly displayed. He's left hopeful. She seems hopeful and ready to move on but the question does still linger as to whether they will make it or not. Nice job.

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2019

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your perspective on the piece. I am flattered you thought it so well written. I don't know if you are familiar with Raymond Carver but his work was a big influence on me. estory