Across a Crowded Room
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Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You managed to say a lot in this little poem, and to conjure up memories that nearly everyone has of seeing "that" look across a crowded room. And along with the relevant artwork, it makes a nice presentation. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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You managed to say a lot in this little poem, and to conjure up memories that nearly everyone has of seeing "that" look across a crowded room. And along with the relevant artwork, it makes a nice presentation. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Stephanie -- so glad you enjoyed my sultry entry here! ;) Have a great evening! :) ;)
Comment from sfharper
Hot little poem of tentative love, the potent meeting of the eyes. Good use of your syllables picking specific things and tying them together, Enjoyed reading it. Love the artwork.
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Hot little poem of tentative love, the potent meeting of the eyes. Good use of your syllables picking specific things and tying them together, Enjoyed reading it. Love the artwork.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, sf -- so glad you enjoyed my sultry entry here! ;) Have a great evening! :) ;)
Comment from Mark D. R.
Delicious illustration complements your short, restricted text
the (alluring?) gaze is perfect for whispering his name
best wishes in your contest entry
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Delicious illustration complements your short, restricted text
the (alluring?) gaze is perfect for whispering his name
best wishes in your contest entry
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Mark -- so glad you enjoyed! ;) Have a great evening! :) ;)
Comment from Cycler
Well done!
The Form is great and the resulting impact of picture, words, concept, and actualization is marvelous. This is a complete work of art.
DB
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Well done!
The Form is great and the resulting impact of picture, words, concept, and actualization is marvelous. This is a complete work of art.
DB
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Wow, DB!! :) You have certainly made my day with those wonderful comments and those bright shiny stars!! :) ;) Here's wishing you a day of smiles just like the one you've given me!! :) ;) Take care! :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice, colorful image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one continuous thought.
-The imagery in line two
has a soft, quiet sound.
-Without coming out
and saying it, you also
show the person's interest in her.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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-Very nice, colorful image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective use of one continuous thought.
-The imagery in line two
has a soft, quiet sound.
-Without coming out
and saying it, you also
show the person's interest in her.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your review and wonderful comments, Pam -- always appreciate your stopping by! :) Have a wonderful day! :)
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You are very welcome, and you have a wonderful day, too!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really good. You've done a superb job with the syllable count presenting a well executed poem. I love the accompanying artwork which compliments this very well. I enjoyed this. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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This is really good. You've done a superb job with the syllable count presenting a well executed poem. I love the accompanying artwork which compliments this very well. I enjoyed this. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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So, you seem to have positive comments .... could you please explain why you only gave 2 stars? There are no negative critiques or suggestions for improvement....why, then, the below average rating? Thank you very much for letting me know so that I have something to work toward next time......
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I didn't give you two stars on purpose. It was an accident. I have updated my rating. Sorry for the error.
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Thank you, Jeffrey -- I really was a bit confused. :) ;) ;) Have a great evening! :) ;)
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Congratulations on a well deserved win!
Comment from jmshumate
You did a good job conveying a thought and scene for the reader. You did this in three lines and nine syllables, not an easy task. I think most have at one time or other experienced the gaze across the room, whether imagined or real. Thank you for sharing.
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You did a good job conveying a thought and scene for the reader. You did this in three lines and nine syllables, not an easy task. I think most have at one time or other experienced the gaze across the room, whether imagined or real. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping in for the read and review, jm -- be sure to stop by anytime! :) Have a great day! :)
Comment from kahpot
Excellent poem (words) to support this wonderful artwork, I am sure I have gazed and whispered, this is very well presented and written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Excellent poem (words) to support this wonderful artwork, I am sure I have gazed and whispered, this is very well presented and written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping in for the read and review, kahpot -- be sure to stop by anytime! :) Have a great day! :)
Comment from Christine C Autry
First of all I liked the artwork. The poem for it so well. It is true how a gaze will make You feel. Thank You for sharing this. I appreciate your work.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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First of all I liked the artwork. The poem for it so well. It is true how a gaze will make You feel. Thank You for sharing this. I appreciate your work.
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thank you for dropping in for the read and review, Christine -- be sure to stop by anytime! :) Have a great day! :)