Perennials of War
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Comment from Gert sherwood
What I like about this chapter Barb
is how Susan Anderson's mother is trying to
convince Shana to me a very good reason that she should marry Anderson, when she was talking to Shana said
"If you're worried because you're not in the same economic class as we are, we're not at all concerned about that. No, you're not interested in Drew's money. That's obvious. Anybody who thinks differently is crazy."
Gert
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What I like about this chapter Barb
is how Susan Anderson's mother is trying to
convince Shana to me a very good reason that she should marry Anderson, when she was talking to Shana said
"If you're worried because you're not in the same economic class as we are, we're not at all concerned about that. No, you're not interested in Drew's money. That's obvious. Anybody who thinks differently is crazy."
Gert
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Rob Caudle
Another fine contiuation of your tale as usual it is very well penned.. I actually found the discussion about the bet with the differnce between Batting avereage and slugging percentage to be one of the thing that makes your work so beliveable I kow it is a small point but they can make all the difference.
Rob
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Another fine contiuation of your tale as usual it is very well penned.. I actually found the discussion about the bet with the differnce between Batting avereage and slugging percentage to be one of the thing that makes your work so beliveable I kow it is a small point but they can make all the difference.
Rob
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I try to make my stories something that can happen in everyday life.
Comment from c_lucas
People who marry for money are usually are not any better off. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
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People who marry for money are usually are not any better off. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Tootsie55
So glad the SIXES are still around. I loved this chapter even in spite of or because of... the drama...I loved all the personal stuff and getting to know Drew's family more. Just ONE SPAG...I happen(ed) to be working that day.
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So glad the SIXES are still around. I loved this chapter even in spite of or because of... the drama...I loved all the personal stuff and getting to know Drew's family more. Just ONE SPAG...I happen(ed) to be working that day.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Barbara, this is just so sweet, and now Susan and Michael are taking things into their own hands. About time that somebody tries to make Shana see sense. Great chapter.
As Anderson opened the door, he paused. "Dad, how you on ammunition?" ...."Dad, how are you on ammunition?"
All the best. Ulla:)))
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Awe, Barbara, this is just so sweet, and now Susan and Michael are taking things into their own hands. About time that somebody tries to make Shana see sense. Great chapter.
As Anderson opened the door, he paused. "Dad, how you on ammunition?" ...."Dad, how are you on ammunition?"
All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the catch. I will add that word.
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Interesting story. Just noticed a couple things. The first sentence is in present tense and the rest are in past tense. Am I reading it right, that Grandma and Grandpa are using grenade launchers? I like the playful banter in the last part and "English please" bits. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
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Interesting story. Just noticed a couple things. The first sentence is in present tense and the rest are in past tense. Am I reading it right, that Grandma and Grandpa are using grenade launchers? I like the playful banter in the last part and "English please" bits. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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LOL Grandma and Grandpa are no longer using grenade launchers. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from tfawcus
I like the way you have the conversation between Drew and Shana and Michael and Sarah running in parallel here. There was one point though ("Son, speak English." ) where I didn't at first realise the speakers had changed. Perhaps a dialogue tag would help here.
Just one typo to fix:
No, you're not interesting in Drew's money.
This is a strong, action packed chapter in which you make some interesting inter-generational comments.
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I like the way you have the conversation between Drew and Shana and Michael and Sarah running in parallel here. There was one point though ("Son, speak English." ) where I didn't at first realise the speakers had changed. Perhaps a dialogue tag would help here.
Just one typo to fix:
No, you're not interesting in Drew's money.
This is a strong, action packed chapter in which you make some interesting inter-generational comments.
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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I think I made the corrections. LOL
Comment from royowen
Well done Shana, it's obvious this episode is heading in two directions, one , that Shana is quite definitely in love with Drew, the other Drew's parents sharing th fact that their background was similar class wise but not religion wise. Will Drew and his protective strategies work. This is a great write Barbara, excellently scribed, well done, blessings, Roy
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Well done Shana, it's obvious this episode is heading in two directions, one , that Shana is quite definitely in love with Drew, the other Drew's parents sharing th fact that their background was similar class wise but not religion wise. Will Drew and his protective strategies work. This is a great write Barbara, excellently scribed, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome