Comment from Janice Canerdy

Average

Please don't mute me for giving you a three! First of all, line 2 has only six
syllables. Also, I have tried to see this as a humorous piece, but I don't
think the idea of destructive lies is funny. I really AM trying to help.
Number of syllables is not a matter of my opinion!


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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Oh thank you for catching line 2! :) I appreciate that... I agree ... it is pushing the humor point a bit. Humor is always in the eye of the beholder. My thought is the use of sarcasm... in line 3. Unless you are bold you can escape... which foils the liar's plan, which could be humorous. However, the reader is allowed their own interpretation of course. :)

Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate your thoughts and comments. I fixed line 2.

Happy New Year. :).

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

good luck in humorous 5-7-5... The imagery you picked is outstanding... the words are crazy... great job on this and again hope you win... thanks so much for your image put to words and imagery... yours, diana

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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019

Thank you for your feedback and comments. I appreciate the review.

Happy New Year.