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Comment from kiwijenny
I never managed to stay clean. The tomboy in me chose to wallow...I love and lived that line. But I wasn't saved by the bell most times.
Beautiful poem. Good luck with the contest
God bless
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I never managed to stay clean. The tomboy in me chose to wallow...I love and lived that line. But I wasn't saved by the bell most times.
Beautiful poem. Good luck with the contest
God bless
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Clean was not in my vocabulary wherever dirt was thats where I'd be... yours, diana
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Lol
Comment from BeasPeas
Great job with this interesting poem. Innocence, discovery, and taking life on life's terms--the thorns--but they can surely wait until we have a chance to enjoy our childhood, hopefully. Marilyn
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Great job with this interesting poem. Innocence, discovery, and taking life on life's terms--the thorns--but they can surely wait until we have a chance to enjoy our childhood, hopefully. Marilyn
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Hopefully! thanks kiddo... diana
Comment from Ms. Snyder
What a sweet contest entry. I love the font choice, the coloring in the background of your picture. I think all of it is whimsical. It is a great story about when life was still fun! All the rhyming lines seem to flow. Good luck in the contest.
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What a sweet contest entry. I love the font choice, the coloring in the background of your picture. I think all of it is whimsical. It is a great story about when life was still fun! All the rhyming lines seem to flow. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your glowing review and you and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from LIJ Red
Not free verse exactly with the second lines of the couplets rhyming...a new style, maybe? Excellent images and straight to the heart of that unusual prompt...
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Not free verse exactly with the second lines of the couplets rhyming...a new style, maybe? Excellent images and straight to the heart of that unusual prompt...
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Sally Law
This was a unique and sweet contest entry. This theme suited your fine piece perfectly. It will be hard to beat this in the contest. My best to you and yours. I hope you are enjoying a simpler time.
Sal
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This was a unique and sweet contest entry. This theme suited your fine piece perfectly. It will be hard to beat this in the contest. My best to you and yours. I hope you are enjoying a simpler time.
Sal
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a beautiful contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture is perfect and so sweet. Your couplets are used with great purpose to tell the story this little girl experiences. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
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This is a beautiful contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture is perfect and so sweet. Your couplets are used with great purpose to tell the story this little girl experiences. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from oorwull
Nice tale of the freshness of morning. The dew, the butterflies, the fragrant smells, all building a picture of the day to come. Then the "red flash", obviously covered in thorns. However, the lunchtime call came just in time to avoid the disaster.
Liked this very much, from the point of view of expressing sunshine nature.
Oorwull
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Nice tale of the freshness of morning. The dew, the butterflies, the fragrant smells, all building a picture of the day to come. Then the "red flash", obviously covered in thorns. However, the lunchtime call came just in time to avoid the disaster.
Liked this very much, from the point of view of expressing sunshine nature.
Oorwull
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
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Your very welcome
Oorwull
Comment from Michele Harber
This is such a beautiful and innocent poem, expressing the joy and wonder that children feel in discovering the things that we jaded adults already knew were there. I got a kick out of the roses' last-minute reprieve. Your poem flows easily, and your rhymes work well.
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This is such a beautiful and innocent poem, expressing the joy and wonder that children feel in discovering the things that we jaded adults already knew were there. I got a kick out of the roses' last-minute reprieve. Your poem flows easily, and your rhymes work well.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice poem you have penned for the "When Life was still fun" contest. You used adorable imagery from the picture of the little girl smelling the pretty red flowers. You used great words as well. Best wishes in the contest. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very nice poem you have penned for the "When Life was still fun" contest. You used adorable imagery from the picture of the little girl smelling the pretty red flowers. You used great words as well. Best wishes in the contest. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Violet WolfChild
Excellent depiction of a young girl, just learning the ways of the world. I loved your ending. The thorns of life would have to wait. Such a strong image of how messy and painful life can become, but like the rose, there's also beauty. Good luck in the contest.
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Excellent depiction of a young girl, just learning the ways of the world. I loved your ending. The thorns of life would have to wait. Such a strong image of how messy and painful life can become, but like the rose, there's also beauty. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
