Hopeful
Every anxious visit20 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
this very short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, such a sweet sentiment delivered so gently. good luck in the contest..
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this very short poem is delightful. You have done a fine job with this, such a sweet sentiment delivered so gently. good luck in the contest..
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jaye Bennett
The poet nailed the parameters of the contest: Anxious Minutes, 20-word, 5-lines, expressing anxious minutes. In hospitals and long-term care, this is a very real happening for many patients/clients. The poet expressed well the anxious wait for the answer. Good job.
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The poet nailed the parameters of the contest: Anxious Minutes, 20-word, 5-lines, expressing anxious minutes. In hospitals and long-term care, this is a very real happening for many patients/clients. The poet expressed well the anxious wait for the answer. Good job.
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Thank you very much
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a difficult situation to go through--and an anxious one. I am assuming Alzheimer's or dementia is what your well-written and heart-provoking poem is about. From your very first line, you hook the reader. :) A wonderful contest entry. I hope you do.
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What a difficult situation to go through--and an anxious one. I am assuming Alzheimer's or dementia is what your well-written and heart-provoking poem is about. From your very first line, you hook the reader. :) A wonderful contest entry. I hope you do.
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Thank you and yes Alzheimer's
Comment from AdaJulie
This is so perfectly put together. I am very impressed and so grateful i got to read this. You are so talented. Great job and good luck to you in sharing yiur talent with many!
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This is so perfectly put together. I am very impressed and so grateful i got to read this. You are so talented. Great job and good luck to you in sharing yiur talent with many!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Many thanks
Comment from Miss Sherry
Everyone with elderly loved ones wonders if the memory will hold up...every affirmation is a victory and a joy. This is just wonderful, with artwork that touches the heart.
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Everyone with elderly loved ones wonders if the memory will hold up...every affirmation is a victory and a joy. This is just wonderful, with artwork that touches the heart.
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Many thanks and yes quite sad
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
A lovely piece this. You coudl have presented it without a picture, as the words work very hard to direct the reader's thoughts.
In passing, I am not sure if the comma on line three (after 'waiting') is required - and perhaps that line should end with a semi-colon i.e. "these words;" These are just small point- and I may be wrong.
This is very strong writing in a very limited format - well done.
I wish you well with this
cheers
phill
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Hello Anon
A lovely piece this. You coudl have presented it without a picture, as the words work very hard to direct the reader's thoughts.
In passing, I am not sure if the comma on line three (after 'waiting') is required - and perhaps that line should end with a semi-colon i.e. "these words;" These are just small point- and I may be wrong.
This is very strong writing in a very limited format - well done.
I wish you well with this
cheers
phill
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Many thanks and yes your suggestion sounds correct
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written five-line poem/ twenty syllable poem. When our parents grow older we always hope that they will not lose their mind and still remember who we are.
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A very well-written five-line poem/ twenty syllable poem. When our parents grow older we always hope that they will not lose their mind and still remember who we are.
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Many thanks
Comment from Michele Harber
Ouch! If this is a true story, I'm so sorry. I've been (and am going) through a similar situation with so many people, and feel your frustration and pain. You've packed an honest, emotional, powerful punch in your 20 words. Good luck in the contest.
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Ouch! If this is a true story, I'm so sorry. I've been (and am going) through a similar situation with so many people, and feel your frustration and pain. You've packed an honest, emotional, powerful punch in your 20 words. Good luck in the contest.
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Many thanks
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You're welcome.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A very difficult subject and one that we wait anxiously every day to see if it changes. Very well written and using so few words, you expressed the thought very well
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A very difficult subject and one that we wait anxiously every day to see if it changes. Very well written and using so few words, you expressed the thought very well
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Many thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is so much behind these words as we worry about the state of mind of our elderly relatives, I could identify with your write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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There is so much behind these words as we worry about the state of mind of our elderly relatives, I could identify with your write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Many thanks