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Comment from Jan Anderegg
Really I ask for nothing more,
Than a shed with a half moon on the door
These words took you to a very special place!
LOL
Enjoyed your poem. Didn't see any errors or edits needed.
All the best,
Jan Anderegg
(Author of the Julu series)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Really I ask for nothing more,
Than a shed with a half moon on the door
These words took you to a very special place!
LOL
Enjoyed your poem. Didn't see any errors or edits needed.
All the best,
Jan Anderegg
(Author of the Julu series)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I dont know about a special place but I have been accused of being "special." Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from royowen
Just loved your sense of humour with this one, you've done remarkably well. You've fitted in the required words, done some very creative rhyming, and added some adventurous humour to the mix, well done, good job, good luck, (or is that good yuck) blessings, Roy
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Just loved your sense of humour with this one, you've done remarkably well. You've fitted in the required words, done some very creative rhyming, and added some adventurous humour to the mix, well done, good job, good luck, (or is that good yuck) blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your kind words Roy. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
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Most welcome
Comment from babykoala
HAHA I loved this, I love humorous poetry and this was done with such skill and the rhymes and imagery used were just perfect for the theme. I loved it and it made me smile which is all I want from a poem.
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HAHA I loved this, I love humorous poetry and this was done with such skill and the rhymes and imagery used were just perfect for the theme. I loved it and it made me smile which is all I want from a poem.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! Those words certainly took you where no one has been before!! LOL. I loved your ingenious way with those words, they fit perfectly and are such fun! Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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LOL! Those words certainly took you where no one has been before!! LOL. I loved your ingenious way with those words, they fit perfectly and are such fun! Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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I was actually disqualified from the contest because it wasn't a work of fiction. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Mimi Linny
Laughter embellishes great use of the eight required words and made me think of the old-time hobo sitting around an open fire near a roughly made tent in a wooded area with railroad tracks passing by. His only refuge for relief is in behind a fir and dreaming to himself how nice it would be to have the privacy of a little out-house to call his own! Adorable, cute and very funny! Best of luck in the contest!
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Laughter embellishes great use of the eight required words and made me think of the old-time hobo sitting around an open fire near a roughly made tent in a wooded area with railroad tracks passing by. His only refuge for relief is in behind a fir and dreaming to himself how nice it would be to have the privacy of a little out-house to call his own! Adorable, cute and very funny! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I think you did a great job managing to make a fairly decent poem out of those words. I also liked that you tried so hard to make them rhyme as well, as that must have been an extra challenge. The syllable count is a bit choppy which makes it sound a little awkward in parts but I appreciate the enormity of your task and your effort. Very light hearted and good attempt. I'm sure mine would not have been as successful. Good luck in the contest.
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I think you did a great job managing to make a fairly decent poem out of those words. I also liked that you tried so hard to make them rhyme as well, as that must have been an extra challenge. The syllable count is a bit choppy which makes it sound a little awkward in parts but I appreciate the enormity of your task and your effort. Very light hearted and good attempt. I'm sure mine would not have been as successful. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your humorous poem and how cleverly you incorporated
the required words.
It is a very entertaining piece with great rhyme and meter.
Good luck int eh contest.
Nancy
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I enjoyed reading your humorous poem and how cleverly you incorporated
the required words.
It is a very entertaining piece with great rhyme and meter.
Good luck int eh contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Nancy for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on the verse you crafted to answer this prompt... a winner for sure!! Great job on incorporating humor and wit into your lines... it helps with the lighthearted presentation and the pic of the outhouse. All the best in the contest.
Melissa
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Great job on the verse you crafted to answer this prompt... a winner for sure!! Great job on incorporating humor and wit into your lines... it helps with the lighthearted presentation and the pic of the outhouse. All the best in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Melissa. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, there is a great poem here, but for the forced and uneven rhyming rhythm - it can be smooth and have the sing/song effect of rhyme with a bit more attention - free verse is okay, but the rhyme potential here is outstanding, for example, with your permission:
2nd line - for a bathroom spacious - or - to have a bathroom spacious,
4th line - you can find me in my tent,
6th line - to consider my arrangements flexible,
8th line - that instead of a regular sink,
9th line - to be sure, it's a bucket and dipper,
10th line - which to me is obviously hipper...
These are only suggestions so that you can see the possibilities with your poem and the fact it just needs a bit more time and attention to be a superior and fun write...
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In my opinion, there is a great poem here, but for the forced and uneven rhyming rhythm - it can be smooth and have the sing/song effect of rhyme with a bit more attention - free verse is okay, but the rhyme potential here is outstanding, for example, with your permission:
2nd line - for a bathroom spacious - or - to have a bathroom spacious,
4th line - you can find me in my tent,
6th line - to consider my arrangements flexible,
8th line - that instead of a regular sink,
9th line - to be sure, it's a bucket and dipper,
10th line - which to me is obviously hipper...
These are only suggestions so that you can see the possibilities with your poem and the fact it just needs a bit more time and attention to be a superior and fun write...
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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You're suggestions are outstanding! I have implemented each an every one. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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You are so welcome - it is such an engaging write, I just couldn't help myself - I'm delighted you saw fit to give it the attention it deserves...Eve
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Anonymous Poet, if nothing else you did manage to incorporate all eight words that the contest moderator called for in your entry.
So, kudos to you for that.
Best of luck...
~Dean
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Well, Anonymous Poet, if nothing else you did manage to incorporate all eight words that the contest moderator called for in your entry.
So, kudos to you for that.
Best of luck...
~Dean
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for finding the time to read and review my work.
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UR welcome...