haiku (snowflakes fall)
haiku51 total reviews
Comment from fayesh
You do have less than the 17 syllables for the haiku. I think rather than say "fall" in the first line, use the word "cover" (like a bed cover) to extend the metaphor.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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You do have less than the 17 syllables for the haiku. I think rather than say "fall" in the first line, use the word "cover" (like a bed cover) to extend the metaphor.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gloria ....
This is lovely Janet. Those soft fluffy flakes of snow are a warm blanket to keep the flowers cozy until spring.
Excellent haiku and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This is lovely Janet. Those soft fluffy flakes of snow are a warm blanket to keep the flowers cozy until spring.
Excellent haiku and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Gloria for the lovely review and good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from l.raven
Hi Janet, I keep reading all these beautiful poems about snow...
And it is what I love about Winter...but we haven't had much of it at all...lLOL...one of the things I love most....is when Sping comes...you can watch the flowers peeking up from under the snow....I love your poem sweet girl....and love your beautiful picture...very nicely written my sweet friend....love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hi Janet, I keep reading all these beautiful poems about snow...
And it is what I love about Winter...but we haven't had much of it at all...lLOL...one of the things I love most....is when Sping comes...you can watch the flowers peeking up from under the snow....I love your poem sweet girl....and love your beautiful picture...very nicely written my sweet friend....love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Linda for the lovely review. Love you too my friend.
Blessings
Janet
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smiling big...and you are so welcome...love you...xxoo
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
haiku(snowflakes fall), is short, succinct and very much to the point. Between each line of this talented poet's work are woven the golden threads of truth. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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haiku(snowflakes fall), is short, succinct and very much to the point. Between each line of this talented poet's work are woven the golden threads of truth. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you duchess for the lovely review and kind commets.
Blessings
Janet
Janet, as always, you're more than welcome,
the Duchess !(-_-)!
Comment from June Sargent
Oh, I can't wait until my sleeping beauties wake up in the spring! Just a few more months - meanwhile, I will stay inside where it's nice and warm - and watch the snow blanket the flower beds. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Oh, I can't wait until my sleeping beauties wake up in the spring! Just a few more months - meanwhile, I will stay inside where it's nice and warm - and watch the snow blanket the flower beds. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you June for the lovely review and good luck wishes. I'm with you, I stay inside where i't s nice and warm and watch the snow outside. (smile)
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Your lovely haiku has a fairy-tale quality ending. "Sleeping beauties" was a standout line for me. Your haiku poem is nicely formatted and is a wonderful entry for the upcoming contest. I wish you lots of luck.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Your lovely haiku has a fairy-tale quality ending. "Sleeping beauties" was a standout line for me. Your haiku poem is nicely formatted and is a wonderful entry for the upcoming contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Cindy for the lovely review and good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from BermyBye50
A lovely well written Haiku. You paint a beautiful picture within those three lines, and 17 syllables. The photo is perfectly matched to the theme of winter snow falling on a flower bed.
Thanks for sharing.
Eugene
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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A lovely well written Haiku. You paint a beautiful picture within those three lines, and 17 syllables. The photo is perfectly matched to the theme of winter snow falling on a flower bed.
Thanks for sharing.
Eugene
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I used to live in the snow-belt fifty miles south of Cleveland, Ohio. I don't miss the snow. After I moved to Florida, I missed the first snowfall, but that was all.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I used to live in the snow-belt fifty miles south of Cleveland, Ohio. I don't miss the snow. After I moved to Florida, I missed the first snowfall, but that was all.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Thomas for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I used to live in northwest PA - not so far from Cleveland. The Browns used to be my "team". haha
I don't miss the snow at all..
Blessings
Janet
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Nice job with this. It is to create a mental image of nature and you have certainly done that well. I love the "sleeping beauties" part. Sometimes it is difficult to produce meaning in so small a parameter, but you have done so here without any doubt. Lovely picture, lovely words. Good luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Nice job with this. It is to create a mental image of nature and you have certainly done that well. I love the "sleeping beauties" part. Sometimes it is difficult to produce meaning in so small a parameter, but you have done so here without any doubt. Lovely picture, lovely words. Good luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Wendy for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi jm!
Do like your Haiku poem and your author's notes. My go-to style is 5-7-5 poems or Haiku. In late Dembner, I tried my snow scene with my posting of "Haiku (snowflakes gently fall)"
do like your 'sleeping beauties' phrase as a capstone for your first two lines.
Best wishes in the contest.
Mark
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Hi jm!
Do like your Haiku poem and your author's notes. My go-to style is 5-7-5 poems or Haiku. In late Dembner, I tried my snow scene with my posting of "Haiku (snowflakes gently fall)"
do like your 'sleeping beauties' phrase as a capstone for your first two lines.
Best wishes in the contest.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Mark for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet