Comment from georgelebard

Exceptional

I found it very well written and interesting. I did not find any errors. This is the first chapter I've read but I would love to read more. I think what I like most about your writing is your character development. I feel like I know them.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018

Thank you so very much for the shiny six stars, George, and fabulous review. You are so encouraging. I'm delighted you like my characters and would love to hear your thoughts on their journey. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

I met Gladys in 1905, and it now must be at least 1916, if the First World War had started and Zeppelins were bombing London - edit suggestion

I met Gladys in 1905. It must be at least 1916 now if the First World War has started and the Zeppelins were bombing London.

He had one more year to 'go', so I decided to stay here until I knew he was safely out of Charles' -edit suggestion - changed 'do' to 'go' and removed the extra 's' at the end of Charles. When there is already an 's' at the end, the apostrophe stands as a possessive 's :) Just a suggestion

Another well penned chapter, Sandra. And, uh oh, me thinks she's got some 'splainin to do, missy, LOL. I am so enjoying this engaging tell. It's plot unfolding to a mysterious time traveler's plight... Nothing not to like. I love that she's 'watching' over her son now. Just how did her hubby do it? Or, will that come out later :) Inquiring minds want to know.

Clean, fluid content with steady, consistent pacing. Excellent dialogue and the story is, as I mentioned earlier, engaging and enjoyable. Thanks for sharing your talent with us, Sandra.
Janelle

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018

Thank you so much, Janelle, for this lovely review and for the suggestions. They work well, thank you! Yes, Veronica has got herself into a bit of a pickle here. lol. Big hugs, my friend.:)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great chapter, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. I like the discussion among the 'ghosts' and those still alive. You paint the hospital scene well. I felt part of it as I read. I liked the update and how the story continues. You are great at leaving the story hanging until next time. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018

Thank you so very much for your fabulous review, Jan, I really appreciate your comments of how you felt a part of it. That is such a compliment. :)) Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from SLMorrical

Excellent

This is very well written. I can see why you are at #5 in the rankings. Congratulations on your book being published. This chapter had me glued to it. I can see the two ghost talking to each other. Yes hospitals have a lot of deaths and probably some spirits hanging around. Very well done. Can't wait to see the next chapter.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018

Thank you so much for this lovely review, SL Morrical, and the congrats! I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. I hope to have the next part posted in the next couple of days. Big hugs, :) Sandra x

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ha, I love the opening line, Sandra. You're dead? What happened to you? That's a good one. And how fun the Cecil is annoying the female ghosts. Shows he's still got life in him. :)

I really like what you're doing with your novel. You are writing about horrors and your deft touches of humour make it both engaging and informative.

Excellent write.

gloria

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Hi Gloria, thank you so much for the fun review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. It's going to get weirder! lol. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
This is an excellent continuation of the story
It is good to be back with Veronica in the story
and Mildred will likely get time in the next chapter.
Perhaps Tommy and Mildred, oh I think I'd better stop there...
Gladys is a very good ghost, not that I know many.
It appears Charles is a clone of Sir What's his Name?
So Veronica is in a pink nightie.
I don't think many male ghosts are going to be passing. lol
I like the interaction of characters and dialogue
Very well done, my friend
Robert

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thank you so much, Robert, for another wonderful review and all those shiners up there!! Yes, Veronica is back! Charles and Sir John were cut from the same mould, there were a few of them in those days. So glad they've almost gone, but there are still some around. I've always had a stupid idea that when I go to sleep I leave my body and go travelling around and meet loads of other people doing the same. Because of this I always make sure I'm in something 'decent' when I go to bed! lol. Thank you again, my friend. Big hugs,. Sandra xxxx

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-An excellent chapter, Sandra, that keeps the
story moving along without losing site
of what has been going on before.
-Even after death, Gladys leaves us
with the mystery of what happened to her.
-Ver. arrives on the scene in very interesting
attire, which the injured man admires!
-It's nice to get an update on Tommy,
and know that he is an accomplished doctor.
-The ending leaves Ver. in a bit of a predicament
since both she and Gladys can clearly see Mildred.
-Now, we wait to see what happens next!

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thank you again, my dear friend, for another wonderful review. Veronica has a tricky time ahead, it will be fun seeing how she copes with it. Gladys will, hopefully, get to tell her how she died, and maybe Veronica will know why she's there? Hmm, let's hope so. :))
Thanks, Pam for the six stars, you're a lovely friend. Big hugs and lots of love. Sandra xxx :))

reply by Pam (respa) on 09-Nov-2018

You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. Maybe we don't need to know how Gladys died?! Ver. and Mildred can have more adventures🙂

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Now it's my turn to bewail a lack of sixes! This is an intriguing chapter. A visit to limbo, or should that be God's waiting room? A comforting thought that there can be a halfway house that enables you to complete unfinished business before being consigned to heaven or hell. Very awkward for Veronica though, who is neither here nor there! Since Gladys is already dead, I wouldn't have thought that there would be any problem for her to explain her time travel. Quite a different matter, though, if it involved Tommy.
As in previous chapters, there is the difficulty of keeping Mildred from accidentally giving away Veronica's invisible presence, and this adds a nice twist to an already convoluted tale!
One minor editing suggestion:
"a shock of auburn hair, which, at this moment in time, was matted to his brow"
'Moment in time' is a tautology. Where else would a moment be? You could either delete 'in time' or maybe even the whole phrase.
Your imagination and creativity are in full flow at the moment, and I'm looking forward to seeing how you work your way out of these multiple dilemmas!

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thank you, Tony, for another lovely review. The 6s can be a pain, can't they? But your review is worth must more to me, my friend. You are so right about the 'moment in time' I've taken out, 'in time' and now it reads correctly, thank you so much for pointing it out. I've written that so many times over the years without giving it a thought that I was saying the same thing twice!

I loved the 'already convoluted tale!' LOL! Let's see what you think as the story progresses. :)) Thanks, Tony, I loved your review. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a good continuation of your story and with the hospital setting and ghosts floating about, it stays colorful and interesting. You have developed good dialogue which is enhanced by descriptive emotions. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018

Thank you for reading this part, Sugarray77, and for another lovely review that you've given me. I really appreciate it. Big hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

Thanks for the explanatory chapter, but I'm still confused. I'm sure it will all clear up as it goes along. On my way to the hospital for a couple of procedures. Nothing serious. Just so tired this morning.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018

Hmm, you need a check over if you are unusually tired. Get it done and let me know how you get on. Thank you for reading and reviewing this part, the reason they are there will be clear soon. The story has to have these parts to make the whole make sense. :) Take care and don't forget to let me know how you get on. :)) Sandra xx