Her Grief Is Mine
I share the grief of WWI widows and mothers.19 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent written story of a tragic story of a woman that was basically a newlywed, her husband had to go to war and died in battle not even knowing that he had a baby on the way. Never had the opportunity to raise the child or see their child. You could feel the pain through this poem.
Great job, this is a strong poem.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Hi
This is an excellent written story of a tragic story of a woman that was basically a newlywed, her husband had to go to war and died in battle not even knowing that he had a baby on the way. Never had the opportunity to raise the child or see their child. You could feel the pain through this poem.
Great job, this is a strong poem.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I am delighted that you the reader, Tia, could feel the pain through my poem. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a wonderful entry for this contest. So many lives are lost during wars (woman and children left behind) and this piece explains that emotional journey. So heart wrenching, but a hauntingly beautiful piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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What a wonderful entry for this contest. So many lives are lost during wars (woman and children left behind) and this piece explains that emotional journey. So heart wrenching, but a hauntingly beautiful piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I am delighted that you found "Her Grief Is Mine" to be heart-wrenching and hauntingly beautiful, Cindy. Many thanks for your high praise.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very touching, and a very worthy entry in the Empathy with Grief contest. Your empathy comes through in your ability to visualize what the widow went through, and to hear her cries. The stanza about the young daughter "planting
pink roses on her daddy's grave, without a notion how or where he died" was particularly moving.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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This is very touching, and a very worthy entry in the Empathy with Grief contest. Your empathy comes through in your ability to visualize what the widow went through, and to hear her cries. The stanza about the young daughter "planting
pink roses on her daddy's grave, without a notion how or where he died" was particularly moving.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I am delighted you found "Her Grief Is Mine" to be very touching and that you could feel my empathy for the grieving widow. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
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It was my pleasure. You did an excellent job.
Comment from Karol Bond
Very nice. I like the time period, it somehow adds to the feeling. The image is perfect to the piece. Good luck in the contest and have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Very nice. I like the time period, it somehow adds to the feeling. The image is perfect to the piece. Good luck in the contest and have a great weekend.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for sharing "Her Grief Is Mine," Karol. Yes, WWI was a gruesome time for so many young brides and mothers.
Comment from Sally Law
This is outstanding poetry! I will be voting for you in the contest. Your picture and formatting framed your fine work perfectly. I am very impressed! I wish I knew who you were mystery poet! Enjoy your six!
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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This is outstanding poetry! I will be voting for you in the contest. Your picture and formatting framed your fine work perfectly. I am very impressed! I wish I knew who you were mystery poet! Enjoy your six!
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for sharing "Her Grief Is Mine," Sally. I truly appreciate your high praise and endorsement. Also thank you for those six bright stars.
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You are welcome mystery writer. I voted for you, too!
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Thank you. I appreciate your endorsement.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Vividly, you have expressed your empathy with grief, you grieved for all the mothers and widows of the generation of young soldiers lost in the great war; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Vividly, you have expressed your empathy with grief, you grieved for all the mothers and widows of the generation of young soldiers lost in the great war; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for sharing "Her Grief Is Mine" and your very kind praise.
Comment from zanya
Grief made tangible here with no frills or frolic - just the harsh reality of a pregnant wife learning of the premature death of her young husband in war and then the aftermath
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Grief made tangible here with no frills or frolic - just the harsh reality of a pregnant wife learning of the premature death of her young husband in war and then the aftermath
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I am very flattered, zanya, that you believe I made grief tangible in "Her Grief Is Mine." Many thanks for your kind praise and that galaxy of bright stars.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This is a beautiful tribute to the women who were widowed during WW1. As a fellow poet, may I make a suggestion? Do you feel that the poem may improve if in the last verse it is the daughter who comes and weeps for the father she never knew? Or if you want it to be all about the widow, perhaps say where the daughter is now? I feel as if I'm looking for the little girl and wonder where she is and what happened to her. The poem is lovely as it is though, the artwork is beautiful. Well done cheers Cass
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This is a beautiful tribute to the women who were widowed during WW1. As a fellow poet, may I make a suggestion? Do you feel that the poem may improve if in the last verse it is the daughter who comes and weeps for the father she never knew? Or if you want it to be all about the widow, perhaps say where the daughter is now? I feel as if I'm looking for the little girl and wonder where she is and what happened to her. The poem is lovely as it is though, the artwork is beautiful. Well done cheers Cass
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review of HER GRIEF IS MINE. I truly appreciate your praise, your suggestions, and those six bright stars. I really want to focus on the widow whose grief is unending. I think the daughter loses interest in the father she never met. . . but I could be very wrong.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Her Grief is Mine, captures the suffering of a young widow and eventually her daughters understanding of loss. The rhyme pops in at proper times to connect the phrasing to movement and the transition from loss to child to older widow. Great example of the challenge theme.
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This poem, Her Grief is Mine, captures the suffering of a young widow and eventually her daughters understanding of loss. The rhyme pops in at proper times to connect the phrasing to movement and the transition from loss to child to older widow. Great example of the challenge theme.
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Bill, for your close reading and insightful comments.