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A Ride with Grampa11 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful hook you use the writing prompt for and what a delightful story you tell of memories of your lovely grandparents. It is warm and it is inspiring...and it definitely holds the reader's attention! :) Be sure to pop in there and put a comma instead of a period between the first two phrases in your sixth paragraph (about cards) -- the first 'sentence' you have there is not an independent phrase. :) ;) Thank you so much for sharing and good luck in the contest! :)
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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What a wonderful hook you use the writing prompt for and what a delightful story you tell of memories of your lovely grandparents. It is warm and it is inspiring...and it definitely holds the reader's attention! :) Be sure to pop in there and put a comma instead of a period between the first two phrases in your sixth paragraph (about cards) -- the first 'sentence' you have there is not an independent phrase. :) ;) Thank you so much for sharing and good luck in the contest! :)
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your feedback. I fixed the error you pointed out! I appreciate it! I am glad you enjoyed the story,
Thank you again,
Tirzah :)