My Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Oklahoma"My life after meeting Jim.
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Comment from Earl Corp
I found the story interesting and want to read more. I am by no means a grammar expert, but I did catch a few things you might want to change. A comma after the second great in the first sentence might smooth out how it reads.You need a comma after forty sites. Why did you say Great before you got the answer to your question about where they lived? Should use one or write it to say I once saw a guy try it- We saw once guy try it. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
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I found the story interesting and want to read more. I am by no means a grammar expert, but I did catch a few things you might want to change. A comma after the second great in the first sentence might smooth out how it reads.You need a comma after forty sites. Why did you say Great before you got the answer to your question about where they lived? Should use one or write it to say I once saw a guy try it- We saw once guy try it. Good luck.
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your observant comments. I will fix those concerns in a moment.