Letter to the President (Part 4)
My political rant while on vacation in the Philippines..30 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I agree with you. This president has done amazing things and the media is vicious unfounded and crooked.
Has any president done more?i don't think so
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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I agree with you. This president has done amazing things and the media is vicious unfounded and crooked.
Has any president done more?i don't think so
God bless
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks a lot my friend for resonating with the message . I just hope more Americans will be awakened by the fact that despite the negative blows from all fronts, president trump managed to keep our economy going and brought back more jobs as he promised. God bless. Susan
Comment from His Grayness
Congratulations and sincere blessings to you for standing up for truth and integrity in this horrible time of DEMOCRATIC devastation across our wonderful country of wonderful people. I am totally FURIOUS! at Democrats and their obvious only self serving intentions of trying to gain control again of their money grabbing scandals ie: standing for dangerous open borders simply to capture votes from heathens only looking to cheat, murder, steal, etc. Thanks for your courage! His Grayness
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Congratulations and sincere blessings to you for standing up for truth and integrity in this horrible time of DEMOCRATIC devastation across our wonderful country of wonderful people. I am totally FURIOUS! at Democrats and their obvious only self serving intentions of trying to gain control again of their money grabbing scandals ie: standing for dangerous open borders simply to capture votes from heathens only looking to cheat, murder, steal, etc. Thanks for your courage! His Grayness
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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My goodness, thanks a lot for the exceptional six stars. Despite some grammatical slips, you were so gracious to honor this post with six stars. Thank you very much from the bottom of my heart. I am a Filipina and English is not my native language, so thank you for understanding. God bless. Susan
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The joy has been all mine Susan and I HOPE you continue writing and also please come visit my works as your perspective would be greatly appreciated. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I applaud you, nassus, for expressing your thoughts/feelings and presenting facts to prove your many valid points. I was engaged from start to finish. Thank you for sharing a well-organized essay. Jan
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I applaud you, nassus, for expressing your thoughts/feelings and presenting facts to prove your many valid points. I was engaged from start to finish. Thank you for sharing a well-organized essay. Jan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks a lot my friend, for considering my post a well organized essay. But those who disagree with my views and there are a lot in this site, thought I have penned a poorly written essay. Anyway, thanks again my friend for the warm review and stars. English by the way, is not my native language. God bless. Susan
Comment from pbomar1115
I can only listen to all the news reports of our president action and struggles. And then learn how the die-hard supporters of Donald Trump feel about the reports. Due to the problem, we American have the privilege to know both sides. I like this quality in America.
Phillip
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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I can only listen to all the news reports of our president action and struggles. And then learn how the die-hard supporters of Donald Trump feel about the reports. Due to the problem, we American have the privilege to know both sides. I like this quality in America.
Phillip
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thanks a lot for the generous five star review. God bless.
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You're welcome.
Comment from ciliverde
Clearly this is written from the heart, and with much enthusiasm, but there are too many error to give this more than four stars.
There are many run-on sentences, and in fact, your essay begins with a run-on sentence.
Incorrect grammar is used at times (in a similar manner to your subject, I must say) such as "I would prefer a President like you, who speaks tough".
Some of your claims are in fact sweeping generalizations - for example the "students who are inclined to be violent and who hate their own country." I imagine that your new president would agree with that statement but I find it to be quite a stretch.
Carol
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Clearly this is written from the heart, and with much enthusiasm, but there are too many error to give this more than four stars.
There are many run-on sentences, and in fact, your essay begins with a run-on sentence.
Incorrect grammar is used at times (in a similar manner to your subject, I must say) such as "I would prefer a President like you, who speaks tough".
Some of your claims are in fact sweeping generalizations - for example the "students who are inclined to be violent and who hate their own country." I imagine that your new president would agree with that statement but I find it to be quite a stretch.
Carol
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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All the grammar issues you have noted were rectified. As for the run-on sentences, I believe there are instances they are acceptable, especially if you are employing stream of consciousness technique. Thank you for reading and God bless.
Comment from Oceanna Sands
I first want to comment that this review is not based on content. You deserve a review based on the writing alone. You obviously have great passion for your subject which comes through brilliantly.
My concern, however, is with the grammar and readability of this letter. It opens with a very long and confusing run on sentence. Generally an opening sentence should be shorter and to the point. There are quite a few run on sentences throughout the article.
Also, at the end the article says," Mr. President, your Education Secretary have a lot of tough jobs to do and she will definitely court a lot of enemies in the process." Have should be has and it is missing a comma.
As I said, your passion for this subject comes through, as does your attention to details. It would be good maybe to have a second party proofread before publication, as it is difficult sometimes to see our own mistakes.
Oceanna
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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I first want to comment that this review is not based on content. You deserve a review based on the writing alone. You obviously have great passion for your subject which comes through brilliantly.
My concern, however, is with the grammar and readability of this letter. It opens with a very long and confusing run on sentence. Generally an opening sentence should be shorter and to the point. There are quite a few run on sentences throughout the article.
Also, at the end the article says," Mr. President, your Education Secretary have a lot of tough jobs to do and she will definitely court a lot of enemies in the process." Have should be has and it is missing a comma.
As I said, your passion for this subject comes through, as does your attention to details. It would be good maybe to have a second party proofread before publication, as it is difficult sometimes to see our own mistakes.
Oceanna
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Dear Oceanna, all the grammar slips as pointed out were duly noted and corrected. Thanks a lot for your suggestions. Sometimes, run on sentences can be employed if you are introducing the stream of consciousness technique of which perhaps I have misunderstood. My friend, English is not my native language for I am a Filipina. Anyway thank you and God bless.
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I did not realize you were not native English speaker. Knowing that I am quite impressed with your writing. Keep writing. You have a lot to say.
Comment from Earl Corp
I would love to see you post this on facebook and see you defend it against leftist socialists. This is one of the most honest and forthright essays about the Trump presidency I've seen written. How can they overlook the fact that the Mueller investigation is based on a report from a Foreign national. Or, that Mueller has gone way past the scope of his investigation and the indictments he has handed down on the Americans have nothing to do with Russian meddling in the 2016 election. Or the 16 indictments he served on Russian nationals might as well been written on toilet paper. Again, great job, nicely written.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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I would love to see you post this on facebook and see you defend it against leftist socialists. This is one of the most honest and forthright essays about the Trump presidency I've seen written. How can they overlook the fact that the Mueller investigation is based on a report from a Foreign national. Or, that Mueller has gone way past the scope of his investigation and the indictments he has handed down on the Americans have nothing to do with Russian meddling in the 2016 election. Or the 16 indictments he served on Russian nationals might as well been written on toilet paper. Again, great job, nicely written.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks a lot my friend for encouraging me to continue writing my views on President Trump despite the discouragement I got from those who don't share my views in this site. I received a lot of flak and consequently 3 to 4 stars review from them. Anyway, thank you from the bottom of my heart for honoring this post with exceptional 6 stars. God bless. Susan
Comment from William Ross
I'm glad to see I'm not the only one who sees what is really going on. he did for fill one promise to shake things up in the world of politics. I think it's just only just begun. Thanks for the share of thoughts and have a great day
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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I'm glad to see I'm not the only one who sees what is really going on. he did for fill one promise to shake things up in the world of politics. I think it's just only just begun. Thanks for the share of thoughts and have a great day
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Thanks a lot William Ross for sharing my views about President Trump. I thought I will be overwhelmed with negative remarks from the Liberal writers in this site. But positive reactions from people like you, helped me a lot to survive the storm from those who disagree with our views. Thanks too, for the generous five stars. God bless. susan
Comment from Marty Skye
Quite well laid out, succinct and clear. Issues lie, perhaps, in some rather long run-on sentences. Oft times, in essays such as this, short and punchy has a little more impact. There is also a couple of punctuation errors, and the occasional grammatical error. Example: Education Secretary have a lot of tough (has a lot).
Overall, well done!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Quite well laid out, succinct and clear. Issues lie, perhaps, in some rather long run-on sentences. Oft times, in essays such as this, short and punchy has a little more impact. There is also a couple of punctuation errors, and the occasional grammatical error. Example: Education Secretary have a lot of tough (has a lot).
Overall, well done!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thanks a lot for the intelligent review, the grammar slips have been corrected as pointed out. Long run-on sentences were revised but a few have been retained. But thanks for the excellent five stars. English is not really my native language. God bless my friend.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
HI Susan, I can't say anything negative or positive about this essay, as I'm English living in England. That said, I didn't know President Trump donated his wages to other causes, no one shouts about that! An outsider, someone who is not a politician, can't do any more harm than those who have been in politics all their career lives. I swear I could do a better job here in England than the politicians here do! Good for you speaking your mind, I enjoyed reading this. Well done. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2018
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HI Susan, I can't say anything negative or positive about this essay, as I'm English living in England. That said, I didn't know President Trump donated his wages to other causes, no one shouts about that! An outsider, someone who is not a politician, can't do any more harm than those who have been in politics all their career lives. I swear I could do a better job here in England than the politicians here do! Good for you speaking your mind, I enjoyed reading this. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2018
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Sandra thanks a lot for appreciating my work. Thanks too for the generous five stars. God bless. Susan
