Comment from Beck Fenton

Excellent

You have a wonderful weaving of time and place. Traveling in time would certainly be bewildering!
I wonder if you meant into or in to here..." I don't know why I always give into you both." It may be a UK English thing.
I enjoyed reading this very much!

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

Thank you, Beck! What a lovely review. No, it's not an English thing, it's an error!! Thank you so much for picking up on it and a big hug for letting me know! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the first part in this book. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

HI Sandra, Hail!!!! Hail!!!! the gangs all here...awesome...so glad to see Mildred floating around the house again...when she leaned her elbows on the table...I was watching to see if she was going to fall through...LOL...a great come back my sweet wonderful friend... so now her and Veronica's are off to march for women's rights to vote...way back win...I hope they dressed warm...let's see where this adventure takes us...I know it will continue to be a great story sweet girl...always is...soooooooooo very well written you...and I love the picture....I'm the one in the light dress...not looking forward...love you lots....Linda xxoo

and say hi to Ian for me....always in my prayers...xxoo love

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

I always know when you have reviewed, Linda, the trumpets blare and the fireworks flare and sparkle! lol Thank you so much for your lovely review, I had to have a giggle. Mildred is back, whole and hearty, just had a new body make-over! lol! I've already put in for my appointment, I have a picture of what I want to look like next time ... oh, and I'm going to be mega brainy, too! Might just as well go the whole-hog and be rich with it! LOL. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, dear lady, and the hilarious review. Love you lots, too!

Ian is trying out his new mobility scooter. He's a bit nervous, he can go as fast as 10 miles as hour! lol. It's perfect for him, now he's not trapped indoors all the time. He can visit his daughter and grandchildren, so his smile is getting bigger. :) He's happy, so I'm happy. Keep me up-to-date with you and your mum and sister, I like hearing where you are. You do get around. :) Big hugs, my dear friend. Lots of love and a big hug. :) Sandra xxx

reply by l.raven on 13-Aug-2018

I guess she did have a make over...she had a new dirt facial...LOL...you are toooo funny sweet lady...and always sooooo very welcome...love you so lotssss...

I am so happy Ian got his scooter...my mother used to ride one in Walmart....but my dad had to stop her...she kept knocking over the store center pieces...and almost hitting people...the fact that she couldn't see them had alot to do with it...but her eyes are better now...cataract surgery...I am so glad he is getting around...that freedom makes you feel better...and seeing your family makes it even better...yes I do get around...LOL...love you...xxoo

Comment from apky

Excellent

I'm so happy to have this story again, and doubly happy that I'm this time starting it from the very first chapter. I can't tell you how exciting it is to get back with my favourite characters like Mildred and Veronica and her family.

So the adventures begin again - Bring it on, my friend. Your writing is still superb and exciting to read.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

HI, Aki, they have been jumping up and down in my head for ages, so I had to give in and tell their story again! lol.
Thank you for joining me again, I hope you like this one. I own you a review, on Amazon, I've read another of your books. I'll put a review on it straight away. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

A new book. You are prolific. This has been such an interesting story, my friend. Well written and I look forward to reading more~Debbie

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

Thank you, Debbie. I don't know about the prolific writer, lol. I'm so pleased you are looking forward to reading it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

What a treat, my dear, to start from the beginning! I love the title...Lordy! Glad you have these two together.

As usual, this has excellent characterization, true to life dialog, sentence mechanics and pacing and a knock your reader over closing twist...bravo!


Spag nits and suggestion notes:


*This is fine descriptive, but could be tightened slightly:

She flicked away a wisp of her auburn curls that kept falling over her eyes before leaning closer to the screen. A hiss escaped her mouth as she sucked in a deep breath.


To me, the words AWAY and HER MOUTH are superfluous, because the information is implied (meaning: infer-able without being 'told'). So I suggest:


She flicked a wisp of her auburn curls that kept falling over her eyes before leaning closer to the screen. A hiss escaped as she sucked in a deep breath.

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It all began to make sense then, the reason why the children hadn't seemed to be upset when we'd told them(,) as gently as we could(,) that their beloved nana had gone to Heaven.

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We'd sat talking for hours(,) that night after the children had been put to bed, trying to find out how it was possible.


* She stood up(,) after she'd turned the computer off, and tucked her chair up to the table.

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We'd finished our tea,(no ,) and had cleared away our cups just as Ann came through the kitchen door.



*I couldn't fault her for her dedication,(;) music was her passion, and she would happily practice every evening after dinner for an hour ... longer if we let her.


*We certainly enjoyed listening to her because it seemed to come so naturally to her.

Trim one of the TO HER in the above sentence (works fine with either one trimmed, so you choose).


*I scowled at them(,) which only made them grin more.



* The tingling sensation I get when his lips touch mine,(no ,) always leaves me breathless.



I especially applaud the deep POV and the sudden twist and time shift.

Bravo

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Rama!! I've just copied and pasted this to my M S Word and will make those corrections. It's really kind of your, thank you! :) xxxx

reply by rama devi on 13-Aug-2018

I enjoyed your story and characters. My pleasure. :-)) xxx

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

I think I'm going to enjoy this bizarre tale of time-travel! The straightforward dialogue and family banter work really well. They give the scene a comfortable, homely feel that is a good contrast against the weird events that begin to intrude!

A few points you might like to consider:

Should 'aunty' have a capital letter in the context of using it as a name?

I've always thought 'enroll' was the American English form and 'enrol' the British English.

The tingling sensation I get when his lips touch mine(,) always leaves me breathless. [Omitting the comma helps to give the impression of breathlessness]

Just be aware that there is quite a bit of grinning going on in this! Possible overuse of the word...

I like the way you have used incidental detail in your descriptions to enrich, not only the scene, but the characters in the room.

I'm loving the way this has started!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Tony, for the wonderful 6 stars and your welcome input. I had the word, 'enrol' with the one 'L' to begin with and changed it when a few said it should be 'LL' . I sometimes forget the reviewers mistake my words as US spelling, and normally don't change them. I must have had a senior moment this time! lol. I've changed it back. I've also taken that comma out and capitalised, Aunty. These are the things I love to receive from reviewers. It can make so much difference to the finished article. I will now go over the whole page and highlight 'grin' and make some changes there, too.

I really appreciate your review, my friend. Thank you! :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Shanbreen

Excellent

Well written Sandra. I found it a bit hard to relate to the British English, but just the same it was indeed well written.

Just a few things:

I took the lid back off the tin and, keeping hold of it, watched as they both took a cake each. (Do you need to state this? -- The line is just a plain statement of what is understood).

There is a typo in the following:

'She's a natural,' Mildred said dreamily. 'I could to listen to her playin' all day.'

The "to" before "listen" is not needed.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Hi Shanbreen, thank you so much for your kind review and for noting that 'to' that sneaked in. I have removed it now. I'm afraid it's a case of getting used to the UK English, the way we have to the US English. I find that the differences in the English language in other English speaking countries is what gives it the flavour of that particular country. I'm pleased you found it well written, thank you! :) Sandra xx

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

This is a whole new slant with Mildred 'traveling' with her. It's interesting that she 'came back' younger than when she left. Hmmmm. James looks so stressed out. I hope nothing happens to him, unless they all travel in time together.

I'm on for another wonderful story.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

LOL, no, Yvonne, James is just stressed from the over-load of work they all have now. (That came from the news on TV.) No, we can 't have him flitting about with the girls. This is the final book in this series, so it will be quite different. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, my friend and the lovely review. Does it still hurt a lot to type? I understand you can actually dictate to the computer now. That might suit you. Keep well my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxx

reply by damommy on 12-Aug-2018

Doesn't hurt to type now. Thank goodness. Have more movement now, thank goodness. Still a ways to go.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

That sounds like fun to me. So happy to see you have returned with a new story line for Veronica and Mildred. Women's suffrage! That's a new idea. Especially with Mildred being included in the adventure. Who will watch the children? Okay, I know you have it figured out. Good Job Sandra. :) Nancy

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you, my dear friend. They are bound to have some fun and games together. :) The children will be fine, just like last time, Veronica and Mildred will be taken and returned at the exact time they left, so the children won't even know they left. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

hi Sandra,

A good kick off for number three here. The characters remain engaging and exactly as I remember them from the previous. good jump forward in time, and then back... lol

It's as if I knew it were goin' to happen - doesn't Mildred clip her 'o' in to to t'? (as she does in her first utterance of this chapter)

'We have you back with us, and I'm just thanking God for that' - need end punctuation before the closing speech marks here.

[ side note here - How about we both enroll for a course on computing at the local college. I'm sure they do further education classes for adults. - my mum did this and did very well at 72]

'The powers that be'. Goodness, that goes back a while now. It's been five years since I've done any time travelling, so I presume I'm not needed any more.' - you have a closing mark here but no corresponding opening one. it may be a typo.

Mildred's delicious home-made buns. - homemade could be a single word here.

His school tie skewwhiff - haven't heard that in ages. lol

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Gareth, for this very helpful review. I have changed that sentence around a bit so as to make it clearer. (the powers that be.)

I love it that your mother went to further education classes at 72! Well done to her! My mother learned to use a computer, just so she could talk to me on Skype everyday when I lived in Spain. I think it's great when they do that. Well, I'm 71 and still learning. Awful to think I'm this far into my life, nearly at my use by date. :) I don't feel that old though.
Back to your review. Thank you, I always look forward to yours, you're memory is so good with it comes to my slang words. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx