Merriam's Wedding
Somethings are not to be19 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
LL,
Wow. I imagine that he will think twice before leaving another woman at the altar! hahaha! This was a cute little poem about the dangers of love and leaving. Thanks!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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LL,
Wow. I imagine that he will think twice before leaving another woman at the altar! hahaha! This was a cute little poem about the dangers of love and leaving. Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much, Robyn...I'm glad you liked it.( my friend had just gone through this, so I wrote it for her.)
Comment from Shanbreen
Loanna, you have such a wicked sense of humor. I find the poem a bit strained but it gets the message across very well flowing well with the abcb rhyming scheme. Oh, BTW, you are not going to get away with poo rhyming with shoe-- it does not rhyme in:=) -- just pulling your chain. =)
Her flowers, she scattered...she'd look back; not ever.
Her note contained horse poo-
she felt,oh so clever.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Loanna, you have such a wicked sense of humor. I find the poem a bit strained but it gets the message across very well flowing well with the abcb rhyming scheme. Oh, BTW, you are not going to get away with poo rhyming with shoe-- it does not rhyme in:=) -- just pulling your chain. =)
Her flowers, she scattered...she'd look back; not ever.
Her note contained horse poo-
she felt,oh so clever.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I think it was my mood....I just told Robyn my friend had just gone through this, so I wrote it for her! LOL Thanks so very much.
Comment from kiwijenny
I'm still laughing too. And poo was perfect I can see that image of his shocked face in my mind.
Perfect bridal poem complete with horse poo and shoe...lol ha ha ha
God bless this was a treat to read.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I'm still laughing too. And poo was perfect I can see that image of his shocked face in my mind.
Perfect bridal poem complete with horse poo and shoe...lol ha ha ha
God bless this was a treat to read.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Oh thank you my friend. ( I have told some friends the reason I felt so goofy was my friend had just gone through this. I wrote it for her😍. Thank you for writing.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Haha, good for her! I think Clarance would have made a terrible husband. Where he found his shoe was perfect. Thanks for making me laugh.
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Haha, good for her! I think Clarance would have made a terrible husband. Where he found his shoe was perfect. Thanks for making me laugh.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Oh Cindy, I am so glad you laughed...LOL My friend went through this, so I wrote it for her.Thank you for writing.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Lo. Wow! I guess she showed him, eh? LOL This is an amusing but sad state of affairs. I have always found it odd that people in love are so wound up in it that when things come to an end thaye do not know how to accept them and even seek revenge sometimes. Good job on this, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Hi, Lo. Wow! I guess she showed him, eh? LOL This is an amusing but sad state of affairs. I have always found it odd that people in love are so wound up in it that when things come to an end thaye do not know how to accept them and even seek revenge sometimes. Good job on this, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Oh Bob, this was my gift to a friend who just went through this. LOL I got her to smile, so I guess all is well. Yes, what is wrong with these people? It is such a wonderful thing to find someone,and it is such a shame they need to ruin it.
Have wonderful days, Lo
Comment from Artasylum
I love colorful... sometimes stinky words they brighten up poems and make us go... ooo she said poo... This is delightful. Loved it. yours, diana
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But she had prepared this time;Oh, (sp. Oh)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I love colorful... sometimes stinky words they brighten up poems and make us go... ooo she said poo... This is delightful. Loved it. yours, diana
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But she had prepared this time;Oh, (sp. Oh)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Oh thank you...I feel much better, LOLThanks so much for writing...Blessings, Lo
Comment from zlp22
Great poem and picture. Funny but also a little sad. You need to find humor even when things do not go as planned. Good luck in the contest. Hope it does not happen often.
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Great poem and picture. Funny but also a little sad. You need to find humor even when things do not go as planned. Good luck in the contest. Hope it does not happen often.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Your insight is spot-on. I just wrote this for a friend to whom this had happened. Blessings, Lo
Comment from KL Williams
I enjoyed your humor poetry! I have a ten year old boy, so the word "poo" is tossed around quite a bit. Lol Sorry Clarence, Merriam gained her senses! ;)
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I enjoyed your humor poetry! I have a ten year old boy, so the word "poo" is tossed around quite a bit. Lol Sorry Clarence, Merriam gained her senses! ;)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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OH THANK YOU,
I no longer am worried...LOL. Blessings, Lo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now there's a twisted love tale if ever there was one put to rhyme -- entertaining and yet painful to "watch" it play out! :) :) Just a few grammatical catches in your masterpiece here -- thank you for sharing!! :) :)
"time;Oh," 'time; oh,'
" falter.) " ' falter) '
"scattered...she'd look back; not ever. " 'scattered; she'd look back...not ever. '
" felt,oh so" ' felt oh, so'
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Wow -- now there's a twisted love tale if ever there was one put to rhyme -- entertaining and yet painful to "watch" it play out! :) :) Just a few grammatical catches in your masterpiece here -- thank you for sharing!! :) :)
"time;Oh," 'time; oh,'
" falter.) " ' falter) '
"scattered...she'd look back; not ever. " 'scattered; she'd look back...not ever. '
" felt,oh so" ' felt oh, so'
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your help! I wrote this for my friend who had just gone through this. Blessings, LO